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dalekrule
dalekruleLv13yr
2021-08-28 16:56

Past 50-60 chapters (~ch 70 to ~130) showed an issue: The author doesn't know how to make story arcs actually develop. Things happen, but nothing seems to have progressed. MC is in the same spot, except some inconsequential events happened (i.e. you could skip them, and the story would still be fine). Oh yeah, this author seems to have taken away the MC's ability to think for himself. Asking the guy in his ring about knowledge he doesn't know is one thing, having the MC ask the guy about decisions he should be making himself is another.

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1rex
1rexLv14

Basically why I stopped despite really enjoying it early on.

Manjot_Kang_7194
Manjot_Kang_7194Lv3

give it a try man i have read upto 1663 its a gem man

DaoistF21Iop
DaoistF21IopLv4

I read till chapter 726 but he is too good to other people and has a hero complex.he meddles in things that don't need him.does he change or remains same?the author other book worm sovereign brought me here and I thought it would at least be like that instead we have a MC who is not like worm sovereign.does he change?

Manjot_Kang_7194:give it a try man i have read upto 1663 its a gem man
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asdasdssf
asdasdssfLv1

Story is actually written very well as in grammar, flow and characters, plot when considered individually. But big problem is how mc and plot connects, or should I say doesn't connect. Mc just doesn't have much agency and there's not much internal motivations in story form mc to do what he does. It seems like author develops some interesting plot, and then mc is made to flow trough that plot like puppet, mc just doesn't seem to have agency. There's also the problem of mc being constantly bailed out by his ring when stuff gets even slightly hard, it's always some magical thing that bails him out, not his own intellect, skill or perseverance. This again reduces mc's agency, it's just very lame. It would not matter if it was just sometimes, but both of this things happen constantly. Good example is whole thing happening in mc's village, he was already ready to go, he didn't have any reason to stay, no friends or family, no lure of great rewards, and again he was planning to leave. But then author made the plot happen, which I do agree is great when considered in isolation, but mc just started to participate in solving this mystery and helping around and we have absolutely no idea why, and there's no internal reason in story that tells us why. He just does like some zombie because the plot is there so obviously he should somehow participate in it. He even wanted to see Lord of Hei dudes, but again, there was just no reason for that, he just wanted to because story required him to. There was no mention of potential rewards or anything that would help mc, if anything seeing mysterious strong person is just an huge threat. I would really like to give this better review, but I just can't because story till 150 has been mostly just about boat(mc) being pushed around by waves, and every time boat is about to crash into huge rock, another wave just comes in and pushes the boat to the side. I would like that boat to have some oars, sails and actual person directing it.

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