Decent enough story, no major grammar issues that can be seen. The main downside is how short the chapters are, making the story more of a quantity rather than quality story. Each chapter is more like a quarter episode with unnecessary cliffhangers almost every time. Nothing much happens in a single chapter and you can probably skip 5-10 chapters and still not miss much. Other than that the story is pretty good for webnovel standards.
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LIKEEach chapter is between 900 words to 1.5k words. I wouldn't call it short and I don't think you could skip more than 5 chapters and understand what is happening since it's rare for events to last more than 2-3 chapters. In fact the entire Vol 1 is 13 chapters. So yeah đ Aside from this, thank for the review and for liking my story. Can't do much about what you pointed since it's a question of personal writing style but I will continue doing my best to make it more entertaining. đ