"Relatable" and "realistic" are two different things. I brought up Naruto not because it is more grounded in the real world's laws of physics, but because of a gradual development of an individual's strengths and personality that have been slowly built upon by both good and bad events over the equivalent of decades in the Naruto universe (including Boruto timeline). Also, Naruto wasn't just accepted as the leader of his village cause he was "good", it was because of years of sacrifice and loss that he went through that everyone saw was due to him trying to protect his village. Also, "happy go lucky" is far, far from the truth. If you watched the anime or read the manga, you would know that that was something that he showed on the surface to be liked by others, not because he felt like that all the time. It's those different emotions that ultimately drew people to the show, which makes it relatable since everyone in the real world has more than one side to them. However, I agree with you on Sasuke, that was an edge lord piece of c r a p of a character.
Lol, I was honestly waiting for someone like you to add their unintelligible gibberish. What I provide is honest feedback with some pointers, not just like a pointless "yes man" that only knows how to write "great chapter" or "moooooore" for every review. I do appreciate the story and how it started, and I bothered to write this review because the authors on this site have a tendency to drop their fanfics because their story is no longer high enough on the ranking. This has happened to plenty of stories because people like you act like sheep and don't bother to provide the author with quality feedback. Do you think that only saying "great chapter!" and boosting an author's ego will help them? Nope. It just makes it harder for them to understand why their stories are dropping in popularity, which results in them rage quitting their work. Also, my dear ignorant troll, do you know why reviews that have longer descriptions have generally more readers? It's because those are the kind of reviews that potential readers look for to decide whether or not they should invest their time in reading something that may potentially be utter garbage, or, alternatively, a hidden gem. Keep that in mind before you decide to drop your uselessly protective reply under someone else's comment. Comments are there for the author to read or reply to, not you.
It looks like the MC's IQ and maturity as someone who is over 20 years old mentally is inversely proportional with his fighting skills....You can't justify the lack of forethought and mindboggling level of cringe/edginess in his thought process or speech just by saying that his pre**** body is affecting his mind or that being a pervert "runs in the family", the level at which this is being shown is unrealistic. I have personally never met anyone over 10 years old who has such an unrealistic view of the world or who hasn't grown out of their chunibyo syndrome at that age. He was born in that world, and yet he is LESS mature than the kids that were never reborn! Heck, if you told me that he has a mental disorder that is limiting him mentally somehow then it would make more sense than whatever dialogue is being shown here. This fanfic started off well enough, with an understandable thought process from the MC, and then as soon as the MC started training or got a girlfriend, it's like he devolved into a glorified primate with an overblown ego the size of Mt Everest. I was never a fan of Rudeus in the novel, but how it THAT clown, who was a former trash NEET with mental scars(if you can even call them that), more mature then someone who was supposedly at least a semi-functioning ***** before dying? Author, please, don't ruin this fanfic with subpar dialogue. A good rule of thumb is, if you can't imagine someone saying something in real life without hiding their face in utter shame, or you saying it in front of a crowd, then it probably shouldn't be written down, otherwise it will degrade your character.
I agree with you that it depends on the story. Depending on the story's setting and what power level the mc starts off with, then it can turn out to be an entertaining story, like Onepunch Man or even the Hulk, although some of his powers also get blown out of proportion. However, the story in this case gives the mc a pretty clear immortality power and progresses for the first couple of time skips spanning over 100 years as it being his only power. Now, all of a sudden, the mc gets op Phoenix powers because of "reasons"? That wouldn't be good storytelling, that is just the author running out of ideas to push the story forward and so he/she uses a spontaneous power-up of ridiculous proportions. It's one thing of using something like a super-soldier serum to give the mc a slight physical power boost, that MAY somehow synergize with his mutant genes, since they are both of the physical strength/healing/endurance type, and cause a stronger effect then with Captain America. But if the same serum somehow gives the mc the power to warp reality? At this point I call bullshit, as with many actual comic books. There has to be a logical explanation that is not too farfetched as to why/how the power up occurred. For example, if for the majority of the story the mc has fire powers, and then the author runs out of ideas on its various applications, they can't just say that the mc can now all of a sudden control time because of the following logical leaps--->fire powers means that mc can control the vibration rate or movement of atoms, which leads to them being able to stop their movement, which means that they now have ice powers, which means that they can somehow stop time cause they can stop the atoms from moving. That, my friends, is a MASSIVE leap in logic and it immediately shows the author's lack of creativity, as is unfortunately the case with many comic books.
I honestly prefer this version of the story. Way too many fanfictions on this site give their mc some op hyper diversified bullshit powers without the mc putting any work into it, which is just lazy writing. "Oh, not only do you have telekinesis, but also can summon Master Chief from Halo with all of the future tech as well using some bullshit setting of his soul reincarnating within your body? And you have a system that let's you magically get op because you went on a quest to kill 10 rats from your mom's basement? That's great and totally believable." Having the phoenix force would have made almost any confrontation with other powerful beings completely anti-climactic. "Oh, is that the Hulk and Thor rampaging? Let me just flick my wrist and they're dead." You might as well end the novel right then and there. The problem with many fictions on this site is that the mc goes from 0 to 100 in no time at all with almost no effort, character development, or struggle. Do you know why manga and anime like naruto was popular? It's cause there was gradual and relatable development in the story line. How ridiculous would it have been if naruto went from getting his ass kicked at the academy to fighting off pain within a few months? Author, if you're reading this, for the love of anime god, please don't do the same shit as everyone else on this site does. Keep it slow and believable, it is much better for the mc to use his long life, wealth, and experience to resolve problems using his cunning, and maybe some help from not too op telepathic powers, then him having apocalyptic/phoenix level of power that throws all of his previous development into the proverbial dumster. Great job so far!
What's the point of having their powers if the monkey powers are OP is hell by themselves, right? On a side note, since this universe's science is a free-for-all, can Ron get dosed by something like a super soldier serum? Get beefed up and combine with monkey powers and you have a badass superhero.
Just a thought, but to avoid mixing too much complicated magic with Fallout's sci fi theme, I would recommend using "magic" more as a power source for healing from heavy injuries, or as a conduit to make attacks that follow the radiation theme. For example, something like Godzilla that used radiation to power its AOE and breath attacks, or the electric discharge that they show Doomsday do in Batman v. Superman film(crap film, but great battle special effects). Once again, just a thought, I'm sure you got a plan going. It would just be extremely odd if we go from creatures that are based on Fallout and grounded in the evolution/mutation genre, only to, down the line, starting using magic or pentagrams to invoke random spells that cannot be justified by a scientific(or as scientific as you can get with sci fi) explanation. It would be like playing battlefield and someone decides to be like, "and now I'll use my Rinnegan to call down meteorites"(Naruto reference). Game Over.