Review Detail of Im4x_sk1ll in What? A Group Chat?

So I came from Fanfiction.net after seeing "picture of her" because this is a place that does have this function and that place doesn't. I really like the MC and he's unlike many other trashy edgy xianxia protagonist of this site. Also as soon as I remembered that you wrote Tadano and Delivery system I knew this would be good! As a Fellow Chat Group writer I know it's really difficult to manage many characters from different series because of character dynamics, power systems, scaling, etc. My only gripe with this ff is, why make OC's as the MC's heroines, when you can add many other beautiful, strong women from different series? I mean, it's your story, but honestly it's a waste of a fanfic IMO. BTW I'm Im4xsk1ll from FF.net, saying it just in case... Also, if it isn't any problem, can you review my fic? I'm thinking of rewriting the parts that I messed up and looking for different ideas to see what could I do to make it better....