Gosh, this is my first time reading a novel with an interesting background but the writing is broken. There is no distance at all, I feel you should recruit an editor to make a better novel.
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LIKEI really want to throw up when I read your writing.
i wonder what you mean when you say my writting is broken
your writing is too chaotic, other than that without distance. honestly I feel this is a good story and I enjoy it a little. but your writing really makes me dizzy and want to vomit (this is not a lie). I just hope your writing will be improved again. By the way, I gave a full rating for the novel 👍
Please don't feel insulted or angry, because I only give my opinion. And I gave the novel a full rating because for the beginning it was a decent story. Btw I only hope that in the future Mc doesn't become naive or emotional because of love. It will be annoying.
This is one example where your writing does not have a comma. - Thank you for your trust in my professionalism young master. - You know, without punctuation every writing has a different meaning. But the most fatal is where your writing is not have the right distance. (There is but too far) Each novel must have a distance of 3/4 lines of words, not more than 5 words. Not to mention you rarely use commas. This is crazy
well i use comas but since i firstly write it on word and then copy paste it on the account i think it might be a problem of that, and actually i use a lot of comas its always after the first word and then space and write the next word, i am going to check that. I don't know up to where you read but thank you for your comment at first i thought you were just trying to ruin my mood, but i think you are right with what you said and i will double check it next time. Thank you and have a nice day.
No like I said this is the first time i started writting and I took it the wrong way but now i think that i can do a better job next time and double check
