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Blackwater
BlackwaterLv114yr
2020-10-23 22:07

Oh boy, well the story is ok, the writing style is a bit more in the way of tell not show at least in the first few arks. some arcs are realy short others like the Avatar ark are extremely drawn out. The quality gets better the longer you read but I'm gonna be honest most of the travels don't realy feel that fun except for the pokemon one and that one was very short, it's more like The mc thoes a Job or something that he does not realy enjoy. So why even travel? why not go back when you are not realy having fun? The GOT Arc was a work ark The Academia ark was a Punishment ark Avatar was again more or less just work from start to finish, shure he gets stronger and all but he still feels weak and he lacks purpose for gaining this power. like I said the MC doesn't seem to have fun at all, and I don't have fun reading about this then, it's like someone tells you about his workday, it's at best interesting but not realy entertainment. So yeah is the writing quality good? Yes it is. But did I enjoy the story as a whole? sadly not really, the MC lacks fun and motivation to do what he does, like it is now it seams pointless to me.

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This story is really good in some aspects, and really quite bad in others. For the good things: The grammar and spelling is pretty much perfect, and scenes are written in a way that you can easily understand and visualise what's going on. The premises and plot threads of each jump were really interesting (except for the pokemon world, which was rather bland, but even that had the cool idea of megastones being compared to evolution stones and being made permanent at the end). I mean, kicking the humans out of the far north and repopulating the giants, freeing Kurogiri from his mind control and becoming his apprentice, kidnapping Azula and swapping her role with Zuko's, all of these are top tier ideas. (I didn't read the Mass Effect arc since I never played the game and didn't see the point in powering through it since it was the last arc, anyway). The background worlds are very consistent with the canons', and have reasonable and well thought out outcomes in relation to the butterflies of the mc. There are lots of chapters, which is always a good thing. For the bad things: This gets better as the story goes on, but at the start the story is very very rushed. It feels more like the outline to the story rather than reading an actual story at times. This problem started to get better during the mha arc and was pretty much gone during the avatar arc, though. The second problem, I think is related to the first. The mc has no personality. During the first arcs, everything was more like a summary of what the mc did without exploring his mindset while doing it, or showing his conversations with others. Then, because of this, when the quality started to improve, there was no personality to build off of so he turned out super boring. In the mha world, it's like he's acting professionally all the time. In the avatar world, it's a little better, but still pretty bad. Like, even though there's romance, it's more like "by the way, we're dating now" than any sort of flirting or blushing or exploring their feelings or, well, anything, really. So, yeah. Good in some aspects and bad in others, but imo the good outweigh the bad and the bad slowly get better as the story goes on.

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