Review Detail of amaturewriter in A Traveler's Legend: Leisurely Living My Life In A Normal World
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like why do authors give MC ****ed life but make em normal? -we have an MC neglected and abused and abandoned by scummy parents, then killed by them.....he cant be normal,,,then he has a family in his next life, but they leave him, and only explanation they give him is a letter,,,,its retarded, at the very least he should be angry and hateful for being abandoned and ****....like my point is if u give an MC a ****ed up life, why dont u use it?....if u wanted something sad, him being an orphan would've been enough...its stupid. Then theres the harem, the MC has a ****ty life, he cant accept **** easily, so him accepting some random chicks he just met as friends is weird, how come he inst wary of them? Also, to everyone that that says to take yasaka and grayfia into harem,,,,u guys want **** or what?....there cant be any CD, it'll just be forced.....think about it....one is a mom, the other is a chick who was in a loyal relationship for 400 yrs, and said chick left family and clan for lover [yes there was another reason but it was half]....so its impossible unless its forced.....like how come no one wants a story with good CD?, and without a manwhore MC, or some NTR, moms, wife ****? like if u still want em, do it OC,,,no mom or wife, change everything is what I am saying
A Traveler's Legend: Leisurely Living My Life In A Normal World
PandaSempai
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Story is pretty edgy and has a ridiculous/confusing backstory that isn't needed at all. Like seriously, we got a god of dreams, a angliod, him being reincarnated along with him being the last male of his race. This is way too much and I don't see anyway the author could make it work into a functioning story. I forget that there is also a system and a harem with in 4 chapters. Its kinda stupid.
it never said she was widowed or alone. [ in fact bks she has a mate....for all we know that dude could've been fighting, sealed, etc]........so WTF wrong with u bru?....u want a young child to see her mom be some un loyal spouse
NameIsLife:Yasaka is a single parent without ongoing relationships. Why shouldn't she get into one? Do you want her daughter to grow up without father figure? So if someone is widowed early/got abandoned by some ****head she isn't worthy of love? WTF is wrong with you bruh?
IT was mentioned in the novels that her husband is dead. In fact, it's canon that both Yasaka and Kunou is after Issei around volume 3 of second series.
amaturewriter:it never said she was widowed or alone. [ in fact bks she has a mate....for all we know that dude could've been fighting, sealed, etc]........so WTF wrong with u bru?....u want a young child to see her mom be some un loyal spouse
About Grayfia tho. While there is little to none known information about her actual relationships with Sirzechs actualy, she isn't that loyal to him for all we know. In fact we know about 2 things about their relationships with Sirzech: 1) It was most likely political marriage to stop ther war. In fact Grayfia is still treated as defacto prisoner by various elders after Sirzechs effective suicide into sealing Trihexa. 2) She ain't that loyal to him tbh. Whole drunken bath scene with Issei in canon is pretty selfsufficient in portraying this. There is plenty of room for any AU to justify going for Grayfia.
amaturewriter:it never said she was widowed or alone. [ in fact bks she has a mate....for all we know that dude could've been fighting, sealed, etc]........so WTF wrong with u bru?....u want a young child to see her mom be some un loyal spouse
dude, let this argument go......look,, first of, gray and siz werent arranged, they were in love, why? both tried to kill each other, different factions, two, I agree, she aint loyal cause this is dxd or more accurately a harem FF, and in harem FF, more often than not, any hot chick will always be with the MC........that scenne happened cause it was a harem FF, if it was real life, unlikely.......listen, get ur facts straight **; u say she unloyal, so why take her?,
NameIsLife:About Grayfia tho. While there is little to none known information about her actual relationships with Sirzechs actualy, she isn't that loyal to him for all we know. In fact we know about 2 things about their relationships with Sirzech: 1) It was most likely political marriage to stop ther war. In fact Grayfia is still treated as defacto prisoner by various elders after Sirzechs effective suicide into sealing Trihexa. 2) She ain't that loyal to him tbh. Whole drunken bath scene with Issei in canon is pretty selfsufficient in portraying this. There is plenty of room for any AU to justify going for Grayfia.
NameIsLife:About Grayfia tho. While there is little to none known information about her actual relationships with Sirzechs actualy, she isn't that loyal to him for all we know. In fact we know about 2 things about their relationships with Sirzech: 1) It was most likely political marriage to stop ther war. In fact Grayfia is still treated as defacto prisoner by various elders after Sirzechs effective suicide into sealing Trihexa. 2) She ain't that loyal to him tbh. Whole drunken bath scene with Issei in canon is pretty selfsufficient in portraying this. There is plenty of room for any AU to justify going for Grayfia.
PandaSempai:Thanks man. Was able to change some parts of my story before it was too late. Although I won't change the system and such, I was able to remove the unnecessary first life background.
PandaSempai:Thanks man. Was able to change some parts of my story before it was too late. Although I won't change the system and such, I was able to remove the unnecessary first life background.
To be honest? No. About Grayfia, I was able to do something about it. For others, I don't really have a fetish for MILFs and such. So, besides those who have no love interest before the plot starts, I do not have any plausible idea on how to not make it look like, "Hey, you're hot, be mine". Something like that, which always happens.
amaturewriter:**: are moms, wives, or widows love interests?
Nah, it's fine. I wasn't able to respond to the comments since I was restarting the plot a bit and changing it. I really thought that there was something wrong with my novel and lots of ideas flooded my mind after reading your review. (Yah, the first life's background was really unnecessary so I removed it) Hahaha. Once again, thank you.
amaturewriter:thank u for understanding I wasnt bashing u
Mate i like you, because most of the time when you write under 4 star reviews it's not really good. So im saving my time, but about the milf part i don't get you tbh, of course in a real life( at least most of the time) scenario you don't get a wife/mom/widow but is this real life? No the same with harems, in a real life situation you don't get a harem.(this is even more unlikely tbh, widows and alone moms are definitely easier to get then a harem. I guess you just don't like milfs? Anyway still like you, but this is something i disagree with.)
amaturewriter:dude, let this argument go......look,, first of, gray and siz werent arranged, they were in love, why? both tried to kill each other, different factions, two, I agree, she aint loyal cause this is dxd or more accurately a harem FF, and in harem FF, more often than not, any hot chick will always be with the MC........that scenne happened cause it was a harem FF, if it was real life, unlikely.......listen, get ur facts straight **; u say she unloyal, so why take her?,
Kokushibou:Mate i like you, because most of the time when you write under 4 star reviews it's not really good. So im saving my time, but about the milf part i don't get you tbh, of course in a real life( at least most of the time) scenario you don't get a wife/mom/widow but is this real life? No the same with harems, in a real life situation you don't get a harem.(this is even more unlikely tbh, widows and alone moms are definitely easier to get then a harem. I guess you just don't like milfs? Anyway still like you, but this is something i disagree with.)
Yes, and this nothing bad. But i hope you don't give a fanfic 2 stars because a milf is in the harem.(i don't think you would do nonsense like that, but im just saying.)
amaturewriter:different tastes
moms and widows are harder to build, they have emotional baggage....moms, they have a child, and every FF author overlooks this relationship build and character build ,cause half the time MC fucks both the mom and child [who is a girl] or just ignores the child...........widow, no relationship build, husband dead, DOPE, let me **** her.....wife, its stupid, chick be unloyal, plus she another man wife. One of the reason I hate milf, etc bks is cause of an HP FF,,,,it was an FF where HP has a relationship with andromeda, after the war,,,dude loves her and has children with her........BUT he dosnt marry her, she keeps her past tonks surname, and author for some stupid reason made a filler chp with The dead husband watching what happens and being happy with what happened and in the end, both HP and ted join ando... fucking ****,,,,.......so yah..........overall Milf, moms and wives never ever have a proper CD and SD, people are just fine with reading some third ****ty story with MC banging a chick....and I hate it..I like stories not sshitty ****fics
Kokushibou:Yes, and this nothing bad. But i hope you don't give a fanfic 2 stars because a milf is in the harem.(i don't think you would do nonsense like that, but im just saying.)