Review Detail of RJMidnight in A Ludicrous Royal Affair

I really like your story and characters. Honestly thought High was going to be how I imagined him when you first introdued him, but he was nice. I enjoy Mark too, his depression I can relate too. Now the problem for me is the grammar, a few words I was confused on, and I was lost by the dialogue that it kind of killed the story for me. But, I do like you writing style, it is descriptive and fun.