Review Detail of Jenjibread in Revenge is Better with You

There is strong portrayal of emotions that did not disappoint. After seeing the title, I expected it to begin a certain way, and I just want to say that your opening definitely lived up to my expectations. However, I personally would have preferred if you began immediately with the second chapter of the prologue because the first was a bit info-dumpy (once again take everything I say with a cup of salt). Instead of shoving all the ages and descriptions of the children down my throat in a few paragraphs and listing them as if they belong in a resume, I would personally have preferred if the information was spread out a bit more evenly throughout the first few chapters, obviously giving enough detail to understand the plot. On a similar note (this is also personal preference), but using actual numbers makes me a bit less immersed in the actual writing. That being said, you have great dialogue, action, and foreshadowing. In case you were wondering, the only section I gave 4/5 was on story development for reasons stated above. Good luck!!!