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2020-06-03 17:33

So far, a promising read. The plot is intriguing, as well as concept. Text is understandable, but I would find myself rereading to get the gist. I suggest changing some sentence structure would do the trick. The narration could use some proofreading, since some transitions are rough. Overall, an interesting read. Keep up the good work.

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