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Hypnoticyuna
HypnoticyunaLv152yr
2022-07-13 23:04

I personally love this story. The thing that pains me the most to say is that, despite being able to easily overlook the constant grammar mistakes, I can't overlook the pacing. It started out really nice, but as the story goes on it grows to be too slow. The world building is amazing and it gives plenty of personality to each world. Especially as she revisits them, however this is also my biggest quip with it. Each mission feels super drawn out and personally I enjoy the shenanigans from earth and the hub more. The punishment arc was probably the most captivating part of the story for me. The rest of the missions outside of the first few just made me want to skip them in their entirety. Overall it's great just wanted to say this first. Now, my favorite part of the book is Kat's personality and her interactions with those around her. As someone who feels the same with sexuality as Kat and is equally as dense, I love the representation and personally feel that you hit the nail on the head. My girlfriend and I have an eerily similar dynamic to Kat and Lily. While I would love to see everything develop just a bit faster I do see how the pace is perfect for a well written novel on that front and I am just impatient. The friendship between Kat and Sue is well written as well, it is clearly shown in daily life how the friends around you have an impact on what you're comfortable with. Sue for example making so many sexual jokes and Kat reciprocating them just shows how certain situations have an effect even on asexual people such as myself. There's more i would say but it's overall just an amazing book with plenty of ups and downs. It shows the characters feelings clearly and is an overall great read. Would definitely recommend if anyone is just looking for a good book.

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