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Terra_Parker
Terra_ParkerLv103yr
2021-11-09 07:16

This story has a lot of potential but the dialogue is so poorly written that it's almost painful to read. A skilled editor cutting out about 30% of the words and tightening the phrases would bring it from a good idea to an enjoyable read.

D.E.M.O.N.S: Getting Summoned Weekly isn't so Bad

Vongrak
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ProfessorofCulture
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it's good, I hope it's Yuri and with a harem. just to fill space mooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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So far the story definitely shows potential, it has a fun premise, good writing quality, and an enjoyable main character. Not many chapters released yet, but the story definitely has me looking forward to new releases. I think it’s worth a try to see if it’s your cup of tea.

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Great plot. The author knows how to bring others into the story, has great descriptive ability, and is making the plot advance just right to keep readers interested. All in all I highly recommend this novel

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jordon
jordonLv10

Honestly the most glaring problem with this story is the pacing, not gonna lie it has horrible pacing. Over a hundred chapters spent in a dream, 10s of chapters on pointless small talk that doesn’t drive the story forward at all… yeah that’s an issue.

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Arkturion
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Willis8rock_S
Willis8rock_SLv3

Overall this Story is sImply amazing. I’m a major fan of non evil demons. Especially because the first demon lore wasn’t evil until christianity made it that way. if you ask me the way the greeks and the way you have it makes much more sense and it is a refreshing view of demons I Don’t see too often.

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Hypnoticyuna
HypnoticyunaLv15

I personally love this story. The thing that pains me the most to say is that, despite being able to easily overlook the constant grammar mistakes, I can't overlook the pacing. It started out really nice, but as the story goes on it grows to be too slow. The world building is amazing and it gives plenty of personality to each world. Especially as she revisits them, however this is also my biggest quip with it. Each mission feels super drawn out and personally I enjoy the shenanigans from earth and the hub more. The punishment arc was probably the most captivating part of the story for me. The rest of the missions outside of the first few just made me want to skip them in their entirety. Overall it's great just wanted to say this first. Now, my favorite part of the book is Kat's personality and her interactions with those around her. As someone who feels the same with sexuality as Kat and is equally as dense, I love the representation and personally feel that you hit the nail on the head. My girlfriend and I have an eerily similar dynamic to Kat and Lily. While I would love to see everything develop just a bit faster I do see how the pace is perfect for a well written novel on that front and I am just impatient. The friendship between Kat and Sue is well written as well, it is clearly shown in daily life how the friends around you have an impact on what you're comfortable with. Sue for example making so many sexual jokes and Kat reciprocating them just shows how certain situations have an effect even on asexual people such as myself. There's more i would say but it's overall just an amazing book with plenty of ups and downs. It shows the characters feelings clearly and is an overall great read. Would definitely recommend if anyone is just looking for a good book.

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wpaper10
wpaper10Lv1

Go to Fiverr a hire a cheapest English spell checker FFS. It's just horrible. Sentences are a complete mess which too often are hard to figure out. Commas do not exist for author, at least in correct places, and that's besides much more serious problems.

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