After reading this fanfic, I finally understood perverts from the highest degree. This story although well written, does not translate to good plot. I dare say this story only focuses on one thing, harem. That is because there is lack of progression before his Pokemon journey at 16 years old. Do you see the problem? He gets his starter too early and decides to not train it meaning he willingly sabotaged his own starter's growth. Even the knowledge he learnt during the years just seems inadequate. Maybe this is because the writer did not have enough knowledge in Pokeverse? This fanfic has such a good starting point that may even use my stones on it but sadly it started to go downhill from there. Various plotholes that didn't even explained properly, weird character interaction and lack of growth of the character in terms of mentality.
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All true points. I can see them myself. As for the pervert comment, I take it as a compliment. Nothing wrong with that. I am sorry you do not enjoy it, however I enjoy writing it and all of my decisions are based on whatever fantasies my mind comes up with. I am not trying to be a professional writer, if anything you could say I'm just a degenerate sharing his fantasies but I can understand that some will not like it. As for the Pokémon knowledge comment, I adore the Pokeverse, from the games to the anime. I personally struggle to read manga otherwise I would have bought that too. Ark is a generic boy, not some amazing superhuman who starts being OP at young, that's likely a reflection on myself so it came out that way. I thank you for your honest opinion and hope that you find a fanfic that suits your tastes.
Even normal person who knows 'future' will prepere for it. And in pokemon world u will train ur body and pokemon if u got it earlier.Not doing so makes mc not normal person but dumb trash.
Xrkerr:All true points. I can see them myself. As for the pervert comment, I take it as a compliment. Nothing wrong with that. I am sorry you do not enjoy it, however I enjoy writing it and all of my decisions are based on whatever fantasies my mind comes up with. I am not trying to be a professional writer, if anything you could say I'm just a degenerate sharing his fantasies but I can understand that some will not like it. As for the Pokémon knowledge comment, I adore the Pokeverse, from the games to the anime. I personally struggle to read manga otherwise I would have bought that too. Ark is a generic boy, not some amazing superhuman who starts being OP at young, that's likely a reflection on myself so it came out that way. I thank you for your honest opinion and hope that you find a fanfic that suits your tastes.
Youq might be right, but what I mean to say is that he has the same limits as any other person would. For example, age. In his childhood, he would not have been able to develop his body too intensely unless he wanted to cause irreparable damage for the future. Following this, he was also working under the assumption that the 'future' would not be exactly the same. Thus, he spent his time doing basics and getting broad sets of knowledge that will let him live in the world hes in, rather than focus on knowledge that may or may not be used in specific situations
AKARYUU:Even normal person who knows 'future' will prepere for it. And in pokemon world u will train ur body and pokemon if u got it earlier.Not doing so makes mc not normal person but dumb trash.
That is an excuse.Yes he cant train body too much.But not training pokemon?And u said gaining knowledge but he didnt gain much so .
Xrkerr:Youq might be right, but what I mean to say is that he has the same limits as any other person would. For example, age. In his childhood, he would not have been able to develop his body too intensely unless he wanted to cause irreparable damage for the future. Following this, he was also working under the assumption that the 'future' would not be exactly the same. Thus, he spent his time doing basics and getting broad sets of knowledge that will let him live in the world hes in, rather than focus on knowledge that may or may not be used in specific situations
I see that is your opinion. You may stop reading if you wish. I have said from the start, this is nothing but a way for me to voice fantasies and no more than a hobby, thus there will be plot holes and deficiencies within it. Thus I can understand if some people find it unbearable to read, so my only response is to advise them to stop reading.
AKARYUU:That is an excuse.Yes he cant train body too much.But not training pokemon?And u said gaining knowledge but he didnt gain much so .
