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PAUL_WESTLv154yr
2020-08-01 06:25

Fun light hearted book. When a little longer 70/100 pages. Could easily sell on Kindle. For around £7....................................................hate leaving long reviews......................................................

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Meh i guess i dislike the system, like the whole flirting thing made no sense. How is getting punished flirting... The characters are super basic, the mc seems to have no personality, as the system will craft him into a possible simp. And all hes been doinf is obsessing over this one girl ... i dialike the female leads character.I dislike her as a person, for beinf a basic bit.ch. And the fact that ahe cant deal with such a little loss... But whats worse is that the character herself just feels like it gonna be used to push the mc in a certain. Direction and eventually make him fall in love or some cliche bs. The teacher ia pretty bad clearly she doeant know how to teach. My opinion of course. But i can already see the author gonna trick us into thinking she is a good person by saying oml she ia still teaching even though ahe had surgery. A broken boomer ia still a boomer. She can be a great person but she ia still a horrible teacher. I can see thia book consisting in just many many conaidiences with forced comedy that realistically would never happen, and ita slightly ironic. The author can give us questions that need "logic" but he isnt clever enough to give actual unique characters and unique interactions and settings, its instead incredibly cliche and basic. Oh yeah why was watching videos not relaxing... Idnt understand, if ur an introvert all that flirting would do is tire u out. Especially someome like him who has never done it. Like i said the system makes no sense and will just be a plot device to force the mc into dumb plota because the author isnt creative enough to make the character fall into that setting naturally.

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