Review Detail of Alexis_Dhundervide in The Devil Inside(mha)[dropped]
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Its absolute garbage the whole thing feels rushed the characters have no personality and twins don't just separate like that because some kinds say bad stuff about the other and also what the actual **** why are like 5-year-old kids blushing like why the **** would a kid in like grade 1 think oooohh my gaaawwd hhheees soooo hawwt like holy **** you make the kids sound and act like fucking teenagers like Jesus fucking Christ have you ever seen a kid or even talked to one before and don't even get me started on the parents they have no personality at all other than the fact that they hate one kid and love the other also there is absolutely no world building at all its literally just ooooh no you control the darkness no me the smart and responsible parent that I am hate you and I'm going to send you off to some little ripoff concentration camp also the MC friends don't make any sense at all like some little fucking Endevor hell spawn would not be going to the garbage school that the main character goes to the Endevor family is like super fucking rich you **** dumb ass just because Endevor is a little shit doesn't mean his family is fucking poor like Jesus Christ there literally a family of pro hero's that pay for wives and stuff to have stronger kids holy shit I'm dropping this but I wish you luck on your future endeavours and I hope you improve however if you're looking for some little emo shit kid book this is the book for you any way end of rant good day to you.
The Devil Inside(mha)[dropped]
Damz
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Its a Fanfic so its definitely not going to be realistic. if you were looking for something like that read an actual novel. Ya i agree the beginnig Is rusHed but i feel like it gets Better along the way. again this is a fanFiction and the world is MHA. the world is basically the same as in the anime. You have definitely seen the anime if Ur reading a ff of MHA. I have added nothing new to the animes Backround other than making it more darK. i feel as if u Wrote this without reading furthur into thw story, But its wHatever, well have a nice day and i hope you find something realistic to enjoy cause most ff are just wish fulfilment. đ
Damz:Its a Fanfic so its definitely not going to be realistic. if you were looking for something like that read an actual novel. Ya i agree the beginnig Is rusHed but i feel like it gets Better along the way. again this is a fanFiction and the world is MHA. the world is basically the same as in the anime. You have definitely seen the anime if Ur reading a ff of MHA. I have added nothing new to the animes Backround other than making it more darK. i feel as if u Wrote this without reading furthur into thw story, But its wHatever, well have a nice day and i hope you find something realistic to enjoy cause most ff are just wish fulfilment. đ