Review Detail of amaturewriter in Deleted Novel
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There really is nothing special about this...MC has a card system, was in the dxd world for 16 yrs BUT didnt meet any of the cast cause of the plot...for some retarded, reason he rushes to save issei cause of a quest BUT he has no powers or anything.... MC dosnt seem intelligent, like this is a fan boy type MC,,,,he has no plans, it starts at cannon time, MC has no interesting traits other than his powers, the CD is minimum, like its not new author level new, its just not there. ie: characters just meet and talk and move on.. Also it seems that this author is a fan of rias, just read chp 3 [not fan fan, but sees her as a somewhat sad existence- something I see as retarded, cause rias is an idiot, not sad]... BUT it kinda seems like MC wont cuck issei so yah, but this is not certain so far BUT even if goes after rias still weird cause she still " slept " with issei...like I dont get why if she does this she dosnt do same for raiser and secretly kill him in his sleep, she has pride and a questionable self worth...she dosnt have to **** raiser, just use a poison to kill and no one will know or something like that, cause if she uses her body to get issei, why not do same to save her self or something,,,this is why she is retarded, to me ] .IDK, overall its not pazzaz?... Do what you will with this info.. GL to you author. **: actual rating is 2 stars,,,,reason I gave 3 is cause I dont really argue with someone saying I am being a cruel
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rais in later story is still ****ty, I am out..GL to you, its not entertaining to me....BUT i will say that the power of mc is cool, even if its common........kudos for u for not deleting
Swatdude64:Maybe I wrote it weird, I don't think I did but, MC actually kinda dislikes early Rias. The MC doesn't see her as sad, just annoying but, he also knows that she has room to mature and not be an idiot.
at first I thought you were just hating, but you're actually a really nice person. I'll try and improve where I lack and go from here. We'll see what happens.
amaturewriter:rais in later story is still ****ty, I am out..GL to you, its not entertaining to me....BUT i will say that the power of mc is cool, even if its common........kudos for u for not deleting
Yah..sorry I sounded like bash,,,the way I type is weird,,,pretty sure ya noticed it,,,,still GL.....books not my taste...BUT still GL to you
Swatdude64:at first I thought you were just hating, but you're actually a really nice person. I'll try and improve where I lack and go from here. We'll see what happens.
amaturewriter:Yah..sorry I sounded like bash,,,the way I type is weird,,,pretty sure ya noticed it,,,,still GL.....books not my taste...BUT still GL to you
jeanpierregerardo:I will continue checking chapters with comments, to see if the MC stopped being silly, because as it has a long way to go, up to the original protagonist of xdx, it is better than this xD.
honestly...DXD has probably one the best powers, world concepts and creatures,,,it truly is a dope world...just the retarded shallow relationships and characters ruin it...I just hate that its basically a soft core **** story
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I will see that change, because when I read chapter 2, where the canon followed and towards stupid things that could die, I left it waiting for comments xD
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David_Drake:This story went sideways. It doesn't do anything great or bad. However, once the MC unlocked his 'Jungle King' bloodline, it went down hill.
amaturewriter:it went retarded the moment MC made a speech and the love of the world went UP...thats stupid
dude that retarded speech in chp 4 ....made me quit...it was stupid and retarded....what happened was beautiful...like the love and **** BUT its still retarded....you like it...you do you.......for me its retarded
IOnlyEatDinner:Dude, read more. Sure he's not a deus ex machina MC, and sure the fic has a rocky start (mainly that 16 years thingy), but it gets significantly better in a few more chapters. I've seen almost every DxD fanfics in this site, but I'd put this among the top 3. Just don't expect a deus ex machina MC.
Yeah, it's quirky alright, raises some eyebrows, but it looks like an attempt for comedy and gag, not really a focal point in the story. Just brush it off aside, the rest are good.
amaturewriter:dude that retarded speech in chp 4 ....made me quit...it was stupid and retarded....what happened was beautiful...like the love and **** BUT its still retarded....you like it...you do you.......for me its retarded
16 years mission of not getting close to the cast. That was bull****. Fucking bull****. You are forcing the plot, forcing the reason so that Mc didnt change the **** out of the world and its illogical.
Swatdude64:Maybe I wrote it weird, I don't think I did but, MC actually kinda dislikes early Rias. The MC doesn't see her as sad, just annoying but, he also knows that she has room to mature and not be an idiot.
God it's almost like there's 50 other fanfics out there that change the **** out of the world, you can always read those instead of the one that wanted to do things differently
Ero_Usagi:16 years mission of not getting close to the cast. That was bull****. Fucking bull****. You are forcing the plot, forcing the reason so that Mc didnt change the **** out of the world and its illogical.
amaturewriter:Yah..sorry I sounded like bash,,,the way I type is weird,,,pretty sure ya noticed it,,,,still GL.....books not my taste...BUT still GL to you