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2021-06-02 20:01

Terrible novel. So many things wrong with this one, but it all boils down to one thing: the author. In this novel you will find the following: - MC acting dumb or ignorant of something that happened literally one paragraph prior or even right in front of him - Letting enemies go intentionally becuase he is ‘too lazy’ and that leading to massive (obvious) consequences, to which the MC later pulls a “wait, what happened?” - Convenient plot armor such as MC gaining a skill or knowledge that just so happens to solve a major problem that arises just a short while later - Author forcing plot via using problems between system and dungeon - Author constantly going off on tangents and losing of direction in writing the plot I’m not going to go on. If these are acceptable to you, go ahead and read it. In fact, this novel is better than 99% of the original novels on this site where the ‘author’ can’t even write a proper sentence. At the very least, apart from some occasional cringe dialogue, this novel’s langauge is par. Not for everyone, acceptable for some, but not for me. Read at your own discretion.

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Ouch, thanks for reading. This was my first real novel and as I've told others it does get better in regard to some of your points. I still have a tendency to... well describing it as losing the plot seems a bit harsh to me but I suppose it's true to an extent. While the overarching plot is always present in the future (Humans vs dungeon), there are moments where I dedicate one or two paragraphs to something Ed is doing explicitly or a sort of smaller arc with say the orcs. Needless to say, I still have room for improvement I appreciate your honest thoughts, thanks again.

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AVOID THIS NOVEL IF YOU HATE IT WHEN AN AUTHOR NERFS THE MC BACK TO LEVEL 1 AT THE START OF EVERY ARC AND CHANGES EVERYTHING YOU LIKED ABOUT THEIR FIRST ITERATION. ALSO TAKING AWAY BASICALLY ALL OF THEIR SKILLS AND ABILITIES THEY WORKED FOR. ALL GONE. EVERY. VOLUME. Overall the author probably did a good job as I was engaged for all of volume one. Then the author decided to hit the reset button and change the character’s stats and everything back to the starting position and even changed the character from a skeleton into an orc. He’s in a different dungeon too I think, but I dropped the novel since I don’t like this kind of story telling. I become invested in the characters that I read and just completely nerfing them back to the beginning is terrible story telling and is basically a slap in the face for the reader. You’re it basically says that I should never become invested in any of the skills or powers or any aspect of the MC that makes them strong and defines them because at the end of every volume you write you are going to slap the MC back down to the beginning. This just proves that I should never become invested and that is the antithesis of why I real novels. I WANT to care about the main character and watch their systematic growth through the length of the novel. Nerfing them back down to level 1 every volume is just so terrible of an idea. Good luck with your novel but it’s not for me and I wish it was more clear in the synopsis that the author did this style of writing. I would’ve avoided the story like the plague instead of wasting my time and just being slapped in the face by the author.

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