Review Detail of NotAProperUsername in Reborn in Narutoverse with a Unique System

I am going to be brutally honest with you. The concept of your book is good. There are many system and reincarnation novels out there. I too am writing a reincarnation naruto fanfic. So, I can understand the allure. But what all those fics have that yours doesn't is sufficient word building, sufficient information about the premise and main character's state and motive. Look, let me say this clearly, I am no expert. But what my ignorant self found out after reading your fic are 1. The chapters are too short. If your chapter release rate is 2/3 chaps a day, then it is fine. But if it is not then, start making the chaps longer with more content. Do not just increase the word count. Try to make the chapters full of content. 2. The dialogues and interactions between characters seems like I am reading a script. it is like he said this and I said that. It is very confusing and irritating. I would suggest that you read and learn how to make dialogues properly. Now, I to have the same problem. So, I would advise that just think about how you would talk to a character and write that down. Put yourself in your character's shoes and think about what they would do or say in certain situations. 3. Give reasons as to why someone did something or why something happened. You are the god of your fic. Anything goes. But you have to explain that to the readers so they understand. 4. Don't think about power stones, ranking, reviews or comments for that matter. If you are writing for fun then don't pay attention to those. It is you fic. it is your world. yoy are the boss. You decide what happens and nobody has rights to dictate what you should do or not. Go nuts with it, man. 5. But if you are writing to earn some bucks then I would advise that you should try to build your own style and give more effort to it. And that's all. I would love if you edit the chapters and make the contents more interesting. Anyway good luck on your paths. May you achieve success. 😊