Alright,.after a week or more, I'm will give this novel a review. for your information, I only read it until chapter 7, so my review might be a little bias because you could have long improved your writing but, I only review what you are writing in the very beginning. I will apologize first. Writing Quality — 4 star story development—3 star Character design —3 star Updating stability —5 World background—2 star I don't know how to review your novel. I want to give you a few criticisms, but I realized that I could also be facing the same problems. I just hope that my review will not make you hate me. Alright, let's take a deep breath and get into it. I give you writing quality 4 stars because I don't see any problems with the grammar but, the way you write your story...It just, I can't put myself into your story. I just can't imagine what the MC is seeing from the constant monologue. The story is changing from 3rd POV and First POV which is fine, but, the world-building is too little for me to comprehend what the story is about. Because of the title and the tags, also from your summary, I thought that you are going to write the story in the monarch kingdom or in empires where the MC is a strong queen ruling over a great kingdom, feared by all the enemies and respected by her ally. No one including the MC herself would think that a man suddenly appeared mysteriously and attract the Queen attention and so on....bla bla bla so, I've prepared my mind to imagine and focus on what you are going to tell. But, the story turns out to occur in the modern world despite all the hint of fantasy which I don't mind, It's my mistake for having such expectations. I know you have the Idea, I do find your Idea interesting, but the way you want to convey your character's feeling is a little bit weak. From each chapter, I read, from the first to 7.. I feel like all the event that happened can be combined into 2 or 3 chapters but that's just my opinion. I'm not that great. because, the event just goes from this to that, the only things that make the story going is just the MC monologue and her little action. in short, I can't give any good constructive criticism for you because my lack of understanding to your story. All the rambling I wrote at the top might be useless. but, from your writing, I can see that you know how to combine the dialogue monologues and the action for all the characters, what you lack is what the MC or any other characters is actually seeing. because you are writing in both 3rd and 1st POV, describing the situation around her might not be too hard. this way, I can feel the emotion of your character instead of feeling monotonous all the time. that's all, I can say. I hope this review could still be helpful and don't turn us into an enemy
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LIKEI really made a mistake when I read the title, I mistook the meaning of emperor as empress which destroy my reading experience for a while. sorry. m(；∇；)m
No it's fine my story is very slow u won't be able to get into the plot unless you have reached more than 11 chapters lol and no enmity it's ur honest feedback, so thank you!
The mc at present is in the modern world and is not aware about what is waiting for her so I tried to show as much I could in her pov because truly she is an evil express, there is a hint about her split personality thing. Read more to find out
