Review Detail of Shiro_the_Hero in Way Of The Darkness
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I have to say, the ideas behind this story and the potential it has are great! Also, I really like the personality of Xue Mo so far. I'm eager to see where this all is going. I have nothing to criticize in regards to the characters, the overall story or the worldbuilding. But of course, I won't only heave on praise without pointing out a few things that could still be improved: Although it has gotten better over time, there are quite a few grammatical mistakes and sometimes, the wrong words are being used when they sound alike (for example "loaner" instead of "loner" - or "less" instead of "lest"). Also, the punctuation still needs a lot of work. Keep in mind, though, all of these are just minor gripes. With experience and getting more familiar with the English language, they'll become less frequent. We all make mistakes like that. There is just one thing I would recommend: Don't let readers influence your story too much. If you think they had a great idea and it'd perfectly fit in with what you had in mind, feel free to use it. But if you let readers decide the direction of your story and give them too much control, it won't be YOUR story anymore. So in a way, be like Xue Mo: Absorb the best and discard the rest, before making it yours and changing it so it fits in with your vision. (Just precautionary advice, in case you ever feel tempted to listen too much to your readers. You're not doing so right now from what I've seen. I just wanted to say this in advance so you can keep it in mind xD)
Way Of The Darkness
Chaos_Prime
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No need to completely disregard them either xD But if someone tells you they want a character to develop in a certain way, unless you already planned that or think it's a good idea, don't let them change your plans (unless they have good reasoning that convinces you and makes you change your mind). It's... complicated. ^^' As most things are. Just have fun writing your story and write something you can be proud of :D I'll be sure to stick around to see how it develops :)
Chaos_Prime:Mhmmm thx I’ll be sure to not listen but I’ll answer any questions thx
Ya I won’t change a character as it is MY character if they don’t like it mah not my problem but if someone wants me to create a new side character that seems to be in line with my thoughts I’ll consider it but I won’t change Xue Mo or Lu Yao’s personalities I’ll make them how I want them to be
Shiro_the_Hero:No need to completely disregard them either xD But if someone tells you they want a character to develop in a certain way, unless you already planned that or think it's a good idea, don't let them change your plans (unless they have good reasoning that convinces you and makes you change your mind). It's... complicated. ^^' As most things are. Just have fun writing your story and write something you can be proud of :D I'll be sure to stick around to see how it develops :)
Sounds like a good decision to me. I wish you all the best, btw, so that the ideas may keep coming \o/
Chaos_Prime:Ya I won’t change a character as it is MY character if they don’t like it mah not my problem but if someone wants me to create a new side character that seems to be in line with my thoughts I’ll consider it but I won’t change Xue Mo or Lu Yao’s personalities I’ll make them how I want them to be
Shiro_the_Hero:Sounds like a good decision to me. I wish you all the best, btw, so that the ideas may keep coming \o/
Probably relatively far in the future. But definitely still in this first arc (the DanMachi one). I'll let them spend a few years together first, I think. I might hasten that development a little, but definitely not by much. I don't want everything to develop too rapidly.
Chaos_Prime:Thx u too is Isaac and aiz are on their way to marriage soon ? Or far in the future
Hmm the relationship is progressing in not too fast or slow pace it’s good for now and they are getting closer like normal people not like how other authors make (me included) which is good thx for the hard work
Shiro_the_Hero:Probably relatively far in the future. But definitely still in this first arc (the DanMachi one). I'll let them spend a few years together first, I think. I might hasten that development a little, but definitely not by much. I don't want everything to develop too rapidly.
Thanks a lot for the praise \o/ I don't think it's progressing too fast in your story, considering their circumstances. Or maybe I just like that kind of quick development sometimes xD Thanks a lot for your hard work as well, the story so far was a great read :)
Chaos_Prime:Hmm the relationship is progressing in not too fast or slow pace it’s good for now and they are getting closer like normal people not like how other authors make (me included) which is good thx for the hard work