Obviously English isn't author's primary language, but it doesn't deter words and sentences from getting the job done, nor affect readability too much. So, kudos there. I like how the author is meticulous and thorough in describing the scenes pictured in their head. Every objects and actions and dialogues all have purposes, implying certain information, instead of just existing to fill blank lines. The story, basically, is a screenplay written out in a novel format. I wouldn't be surprised if author found the screenplay format more comfortable.
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LIKEHello, in order not to take up too much space on this review page, I replied in your forum thread instead.
Mel_Aniv:Does screenplay in a novel format good? or bad?