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EmbarrassedEdge
EmbarrassedEdgeLv64yr
2020-05-19 12:55

Alright I'm going to address the first issue that everybody seems to have including me, MC is a Trap. That's not the problem, if you love traps, good for you but the author doesn't seem to have the decency to put proper Tags. Con-> The MC seems to complaint when people think he's(She's?) a girl. Like you chose that gender when you created your body mate. Don't use emojis, use ASCII in you want too, I don't know why people don't seem to get it. Most people use dark mode or white background, the emojis come as just a puke of colors. It's distracting. Pros-> He's (She?) different than most dxd MCs which staight go for reincarnated devil. A demigod is unique. Then he's not too OP (He's got a system, you can't be not OP with that).

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An actual review from the author with no favors. Writing Quality: 4/5 - It's pretty decent, although typos and some weird phrases of cringey Japanese weebslang is there, if we talk about normal, readable, smooth and way the story is told, it'd get a 3. Not 4 because the PoV is only 1st person, it's great for a novel about a solo character but when companions are introduced, 1st person becomes absolutely negative. Also, despite the decent readable grammar there are moments where the use of (,) are incorrect. The main reason for 3 stars is the unusual way of thinking the MC has, it's fine that he keeps it to himself but it gets pretty annoying sometimes. Stability of Updates: 2/5 - The story is super unstable, the author himself is stuck in between his hobbies and writing for fun to the point that the chapters are erratic, but he does manage to get out a chapter or 2 in a week. If I didn't know that I am the author, I would bet that this was in the verge of being dropped. But it's not, don't sweat balls. Story Development: 3/5 - It's a multiverse travelling story but so far, because of the author's ridiculous updates, the story is still in the world of DxD, but the way it goes through is very slow, he started a few years prior canon and even at the current chaps, he's not even meeting with Rias and Co. Yet. He has quest that orders him to rule over DxD Plot Center Kuoh Academy and so far, he's showing that he isn't bothered by how much problems that can cause. MC is either too confident or that fact went pass his 50 Intelligence head. Since the story is only at 20+ chaps, this can change but with his update speed, he'd probably leave DxD when humanity has been already wiped out by Covid. Character Design: 5/5 - We talking about the MC? Then he's probably the only trap mc with the mind to use both feminine side and masculine side to his advantage, he's a Hideyoshi by sex, and despite choosing it himself, he does complain quite a bit about it, just like Hideyoshi himself in BakaTest. He seems to have a peculiar hatred for boobs and a very emo past but he actually just shrugs it away, normally this would seem like lazy char development but it's only at 20+ chapters, talking about development at this point is like saying a horse would trip over and die when the race hasn't even begun. So far, he shows an attitude that an aware weeb would have, minus the lack of emotions in killing. World Background: 4/5 - So far since he's traveling already explained worlds, 5 star is Impossible, however, the story does take a little bit of time to explain stuff like that Cleria thingy or just how he explains certain stuff in DxD, this part of the review is usually always 3 star unless you're reviewing a novel instead of a fanfic. Overall: 3/5 - Decent writing, decent MC so far, decent details. And that's it because the lack of updates and the annoyingness of the trap mc is too much, he's like this super know it all weeb, though he does probably know it all, if we talk about the world's he's going to.

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