Review Detail of Jenjibread in Lumia: Other World

Sorry, I try to be thorough with my reviews so there will not be sugar-coating here. Writing Quality: 4/5 There are shifts in tenses as you write, which becomes a bit distracting as I try to read. Namely, you switch between the past and present tenses, and some parts that should be a certain tense is instead put in another. Stability of Updates: 5/5 You said daily so I'm taking your word for it. Story Development: 4/5 Sorry for docking off another point, but the beginning didn't quite hook me in as much as anticipated. Since the first chapter was a bit more info-dumping that was somewhat already directly stated in your synopsis, it was hard for me to become super caught in the storyline. After reading a bit, it got better, but I advise adding a better hook. Character Design: 5/5 Pretty standard for novels of this type. World Background: 5/5 Gourmet_DAO pointed this out I think, but I'll just briefly mention it again. Sometimes, the slang does catch me a bit off guard. But since you said it's a similar universe, I suppose it doesn't subtract from your novel. All in all, good luck! I tried to read a bit more in-depth before giving a review, so take everything with a grain of doubt. But next time, I would prefer it if you just tagged me in forums instead ^-^