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spicyscribblesLv24yr
2020-09-13 12:09

I like the idea behind this story, it's certainly an interesting one!! There are some pretty basic grammar issues (capitalization and misused punctuation), but those are pretty easy to fix as long as one is looking out for them. I feel like the background info in the author's notes should be included in the chapters as not everyone reads the author's notes. I also found some of the scene changes a bit hard to follow, which I think could be fixed if the author described the new scenes with more detail or if the author had a clearer way of indicating a scene change. Good work though so far, so keep it up author ^ u ^

The Heart of Gaia

EldritchTheDead
4.8
40 Chs

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EldritchTheDead
EldritchTheDeadAuthor

Hi! Mr. Author here! I'm quite critical of my own work, and since I'm busy I have a hard time updating with a specified schedule. Though I make sure that I have at least posted 1 chapter for my readers. I'm a newbie writer so I hope people that read my novel would please leave a review or write a comment. That way I'll keep trying to improve as we move further into the Story of Knoxx Abbot. The comments help me motivate myself hehe. Anyways thank you for my readers for being patient with me. Hopefully you'll keep supporting me.

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NotBeatrix
NotBeatrixLv2

Wow, I gotta say the first chapter had me intrigued. There is a lot happening in the first chapter and all of its exciting and interesting. There are a few grammatical errors, but other than that this is a really interesting work that I would definitely recommend to any in for an exciting ride.

4yr
Katheriner
KatherinerLv1

Hey there! Here are some web novel recommendations for whom share the same taste with me. If you like this story, my recommendations are worth a try! https://docs.google.com/document/d/19R5KkqHOOHSMDkF4fHscVmxWcYGh0OntYsv8NglzsQo/edit?usp=sharing

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Kotachua
KotachuaLv14

Great Writing! The first chapter has a very strong hook into the story! Do keep it up with your writing! Highly recommended to everyone. Nice.

4yr
GRITTY_HUE
GRITTY_HUELv5

Just amazing!! I just got hooked up with your novel. And yes, the first chapter was such intense that I needed to hold my breathe sometimes. You are doing a great work author and your novel will soon reach in the high ranking. This book is highly recommended!

4yr
iam_adh
iam_adhLv2

I love this story, like what the heck, this work should be illegal! Oh my gosh, I was sucked in from the first couple of sentences. I like how the author throws us into the world they have created. I would recommend this to anyone, this is like - *throws table*

4yr
Scarlettheartt
ScarletthearttLv10

Amazing story line author...The first chapter and you are hooked...Really a great read...I can't suggest you for any grammatical mistakes because myself is not really great in it but there where only minor mistakes like punctuation marks and all...馃憦馃憦馃憦 But I like the way you wrote the chasing and running scene, it was really easy to imagine it in your head that how it was happening?? Short the lengthy chapters, we can read some in next chapter with offcourse cliffhangers... only this is suggetion if you think it is correct otherwise really good read. 馃憤馃憤馃憤

4yr
RJMidnight
RJMidnightLv3

Your story is really good and the plot line is interesting. Your first chapter is an amazing hook that has readers wanting to know more. Plus, you continued with making the story interesting instead of letting it fall after the first chapter. You know how to keep readers wanting to know more. You do have grammar mistakes that are easily fixable. Other than that, good job!

4yr
Dara_Manuel
Dara_ManuelLv3

Good story line and very creative, the first chapter already pinned me into reading further, making me want to find out more about what is really happening, and I think it is good when an author manages to keep the readers on their toes. few mistakes here and there that is easily fixed no biggie. keep up the good work, you created a very solid world so keep improving it. As you said you are new just like me, whatever mistake, we learn from them to improve.

4yr
Shionokami
ShionokamiLv1

So we got here a good story with good characters, good development and engaging, that is also well writen to boot! Your doing a great job Author so keep up the good work as I will be coming back!

4yr
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