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2020-04-21 14:56

Stories interesting but dont make MC a cultivation idiot-ie: a person that shows off, is stupid and dosnt think **** through, so far its dosnt seem like MC is an idiot so yah, dont do it,,,smart calculative secretive MCs' are always dope. It would be interesting to read about the MC using modern knowledge for his advantage, like using physics, chem and bio for his attacks cultivation or some ****, would be cool Also just saying, the way MC is screaming out attacks is pretty stupid, IDK its weird, maybe not do it, plus its a weakness [ i hope I dont have to explain why its a weakness].... add some romance and fluff, just build it and dont make it retarded or cliche or shallow or some separation ****, and pls dont make harem massive. and no wives or moms Also dude, gave you one star for CD cause, I dont really think a child that got saved from kidnapping would be that friendly or open, or even would want to play with a stranger..so yah...try to build your CD, cause no offense right now its pretty much non-existent, [ by CD I mean relationships] **: what happened to the family and the sis? [Also the sis, you said that she became a servant to someone right?...kinda stupid cause MC was a genius under an elder, dude could've just protected sis---dont make mistakes like this.........no bash, just saying] anyway GL, dont make this cliche [just suggestions]

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