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The_Faggotten_Ones
The_Faggotten_OnesLv54yr
2020-05-15 06:56

This is just me nitpicking, you can ignore this. Ahhhh, my eyes hurts, i read too much "MADARA" in this novel, I don't know why I hate Madara so much, not his character, power or his ideals but his name, a fukin' name! I tried to fit other name from Naruto to this novel and it feels the same, its weird. either their name doesn't fit in the modern times or its just fit to where its belong. Oh then maybe thats the reason i hate word "MADARA" so much? well, no, I really hates it.... The romance is awful, this novel might be good if the protagonist just go straight become cool-protagonist ignoring the vageena around him. No, I'm not a member from harem-hate sect, I love harem! but in this one? no.... that cringe lovey-dovey conversation and the sub-character that simply plain and not worth as a harem in a harem genre. and i still can't accept when the MC set to look like MADARA but a flowery sentence comes from his mouth, I just can't.... although he is Nathan, but reader mindset will comes to the real MADARA. because his name is MADARA. So, should you read this fanfic? ummm, I don't know, give it a try first. especially BNHA and MADARA fans. maybe you will like this novel... Damn, i really hates MADARA..... -_-

In MHA With Madara’s powers

MyStomachHurts
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MyStomachHurts
MyStomachHurtsAuthor

Yeah, first time with romance so it was pretty difficult for me. But I do think the chapters before he goes to UA aren’t so good.

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The_Faggotten_Ones
The_Faggotten_OnesLv5

yeah, i just feel that it will become interesting if the novel just ignore the romance though. and not as madara, but your own character but with the power from uchiha. Actually i have this concept in my mind for so long, but I'm just too lazy to write a novel, and your MC character background as Yaoyorozu family member is the same like mine. Fate is strange indeed, the difference is that my MC is real brother of Momo and Quirkless, no romance, just cool-loving brother like Shiba Tatsuya from Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei. He need to work his ass to the top of the family just because he is being quirkless and train himself to death to protect himself from the BNHA world, and I set his persona not as Hero or Villain but Vigilante. I set the timeline a couple years before canon, but i don't know how much because I don't know the age of Momo parents? Momo age is 15 when she comes to UA, maybe give the MC 5 years gap is ok? So when he already 20yo he already proof his worth to the family business, could use the resource at his disposal (secretly) and train his body at 6yo-20yo (I want to put some kind of Limit Break [not too OP] from surpassing his body but i don't know if it will be good or not). What MC do is basically like The Dark Knight, businessman at daylight, vigilante at night. He will do anything at his disposal to immobilize his enemy even with the worst way possible, of course his way of act will condemn by public and hero association, and of course there are some people that approve what he doing. He doesn't support the Hero and He doesn't like the Villain either, he is in the gray area. but in the surface he actually "work" with them, infiltrate their organization to obtain information. He will use his real persona to work his way in hero organization, and (sometimes) if its beneficial he will work with the villain in his second persona and he will sabotage the plan if things didn't go to his liking. I have a bit trouble how to put his real persona on UA, because he is a businessman after all, so I decided to make him donates his wealth to the UA, invited to academy for some sightseeing, introduce to the student, mocked by whispering-students because of being quirkless, make a bet with the students that if they can touch him, he will fulfill their wish if its in his capability, trash them and then mock them back that they grow complacent just because having a quirk. and then AWE.... UA teacher impressed by his ability hoping that he could teach the student, he refused because he has too much work, but Momo comes to him demanding that he becomes UA teacher with hopeful face, She didn't know that her Onii-sama could be so awesome!, defeated by his sister he decided he will come to UA as teacher when he has free-time. and then you just put his "free-time" in every UA event. MC will train Izuku after he learn from Gran Torino, because he knew the secret and he sees that Izuku improvement is so trashy that he can't just stand anymore. MC first persona characteristic is cold and aloof, but that coldness will melt when he with his sister. like to hit hard when people fall to correct their mistake but comfort them later on. never forget to training daily. his hobby is cooking, but he isn't good at them and people around him become his victim. theres some case when in the training camp his student accidentally "kill" a villain with his dish. MC second persona characteristic is cool but not so serious person, sometimes he mock his enemy just for fun, make some jokes on them but when it come to the job he will turn 180 degrees. His second persona won't come out at daylight, and his vigilante name come from the public, not himself. and he is nonchalant about it. About equipment, gadgets, and vehicle, I haven't think about that. but what important is each persona have different equipment. when he become vigilante he will in full combat mode, when he is in his real persona he only using equipment that he deem as necessa

MyStomachHurts:Yeah, first time with romance so it was pretty difficult for me. But I do think the chapters before he goes to UA aren’t so good.
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The_Faggotten_Ones
The_Faggotten_OnesLv5

if you ever interested in my concept, feel free to do so, I will just leave it here. Your fanfic in rank 3, maybe you can make something interesting out of it. If you read my gibberish, thank you very much. I just need a release....

The_Faggotten_Ones:yeah, i just feel that it will become interesting if the novel just ignore the romance though. and not as madara, but your own character but with the power from uchiha. Actually i have this concept in my mind for so long, but I'm just too lazy to write a novel, and your MC character background as Yaoyorozu family member is the same like mine. Fate is strange indeed, the difference is that my MC is real brother of Momo and Quirkless, no romance, just cool-loving brother like Shiba Tatsuya from Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei. He need to work his ass to the top of the family just because he is being quirkless and train himself to death to protect himself from the BNHA world, and I set his persona not as Hero or Villain but Vigilante. I set the timeline a couple years before canon, but i don't know how much because I don't know the age of Momo parents? Momo age is 15 when she comes to UA, maybe give the MC 5 years gap is ok? So when he already 20yo he already proof his worth to the family business, could use the resource at his disposal (secretly) and train his body at 6yo-20yo (I want to put some kind of Limit Break [not too OP] from surpassing his body but i don't know if it will be good or not). What MC do is basically like The Dark Knight, businessman at daylight, vigilante at night. He will do anything at his disposal to immobilize his enemy even with the worst way possible, of course his way of act will condemn by public and hero association, and of course there are some people that approve what he doing. He doesn't support the Hero and He doesn't like the Villain either, he is in the gray area. but in the surface he actually "work" with them, infiltrate their organization to obtain information. He will use his real persona to work his way in hero organization, and (sometimes) if its beneficial he will work with the villain in his second persona and he will sabotage the plan if things didn't go to his liking. I have a bit trouble how to put his real persona on UA, because he is a businessman after all, so I decided to make him donates his wealth to the UA, invited to academy for some sightseeing, introduce to the student, mocked by whispering-students because of being quirkless, make a bet with the students that if they can touch him, he will fulfill their wish if its in his capability, trash them and then mock them back that they grow complacent just because having a quirk. and then AWE.... UA teacher impressed by his ability hoping that he could teach the student, he refused because he has too much work, but Momo comes to him demanding that he becomes UA teacher with hopeful face, She didn't know that her Onii-sama could be so awesome!, defeated by his sister he decided he will come to UA as teacher when he has free-time. and then you just put his "free-time" in every UA event. MC will train Izuku after he learn from Gran Torino, because he knew the secret and he sees that Izuku improvement is so trashy that he can't just stand anymore. MC first persona characteristic is cold and aloof, but that coldness will melt when he with his sister. like to hit hard when people fall to correct their mistake but comfort them later on. never forget to training daily. his hobby is cooking, but he isn't good at them and people around him become his victim. theres some case when in the training camp his student accidentally "kill" a villain with his dish. MC second persona characteristic is cool but not so serious person, sometimes he mock his enemy just for fun, make some jokes on them but when it come to the job he will turn 180 degrees. His second persona won't come out at daylight, and his vigilante name come from the public, not himself. and he is nonchalant about it. About equipment, gadgets, and vehicle, I haven't think about that. but what important is each persona have different equipment. when he become vigilante he will in full combat mode, when he is in his real persona he only using equipment that he deem as necessa
4yr
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Klazy_Labbit
Klazy_LabbitLv5

that was a really good idea you got there....

The_Faggotten_Ones:yeah, i just feel that it will become interesting if the novel just ignore the romance though. and not as madara, but your own character but with the power from uchiha. Actually i have this concept in my mind for so long, but I'm just too lazy to write a novel, and your MC character background as Yaoyorozu family member is the same like mine. Fate is strange indeed, the difference is that my MC is real brother of Momo and Quirkless, no romance, just cool-loving brother like Shiba Tatsuya from Mahouka Koukou no Rettousei. He need to work his ass to the top of the family just because he is being quirkless and train himself to death to protect himself from the BNHA world, and I set his persona not as Hero or Villain but Vigilante. I set the timeline a couple years before canon, but i don't know how much because I don't know the age of Momo parents? Momo age is 15 when she comes to UA, maybe give the MC 5 years gap is ok? So when he already 20yo he already proof his worth to the family business, could use the resource at his disposal (secretly) and train his body at 6yo-20yo (I want to put some kind of Limit Break [not too OP] from surpassing his body but i don't know if it will be good or not). What MC do is basically like The Dark Knight, businessman at daylight, vigilante at night. He will do anything at his disposal to immobilize his enemy even with the worst way possible, of course his way of act will condemn by public and hero association, and of course there are some people that approve what he doing. He doesn't support the Hero and He doesn't like the Villain either, he is in the gray area. but in the surface he actually "work" with them, infiltrate their organization to obtain information. He will use his real persona to work his way in hero organization, and (sometimes) if its beneficial he will work with the villain in his second persona and he will sabotage the plan if things didn't go to his liking. I have a bit trouble how to put his real persona on UA, because he is a businessman after all, so I decided to make him donates his wealth to the UA, invited to academy for some sightseeing, introduce to the student, mocked by whispering-students because of being quirkless, make a bet with the students that if they can touch him, he will fulfill their wish if its in his capability, trash them and then mock them back that they grow complacent just because having a quirk. and then AWE.... UA teacher impressed by his ability hoping that he could teach the student, he refused because he has too much work, but Momo comes to him demanding that he becomes UA teacher with hopeful face, She didn't know that her Onii-sama could be so awesome!, defeated by his sister he decided he will come to UA as teacher when he has free-time. and then you just put his "free-time" in every UA event. MC will train Izuku after he learn from Gran Torino, because he knew the secret and he sees that Izuku improvement is so trashy that he can't just stand anymore. MC first persona characteristic is cold and aloof, but that coldness will melt when he with his sister. like to hit hard when people fall to correct their mistake but comfort them later on. never forget to training daily. his hobby is cooking, but he isn't good at them and people around him become his victim. theres some case when in the training camp his student accidentally "kill" a villain with his dish. MC second persona characteristic is cool but not so serious person, sometimes he mock his enemy just for fun, make some jokes on them but when it come to the job he will turn 180 degrees. His second persona won't come out at daylight, and his vigilante name come from the public, not himself. and he is nonchalant about it. About equipment, gadgets, and vehicle, I haven't think about that. but what important is each persona have different equipment. when he become vigilante he will in full combat mode, when he is in his real persona he only using equipment that he deem as necessa
4yr
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eclairsshi
eclairsshiLv4

I agree. I don't know why authors made an OC/SI and give it another character name and look (in this case 'Madara'). It feels weird and strange to read. To give him Madaras power is enough. And the romance is too 'cringe', understandable if it's author's first time writing romance.

4yr
1
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MyStomachHurts
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don’t expect much- There’s a lot of longer chapters but it won’t always be like that. From what others told me, the grammar is pretty decent and is readable. Updates, I update when I’m not busy Character design ? I tried to do my best so you could get that Madara vibes out of the mc

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