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Sdevo99
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2022-02-15 18:10

Just up to chapter 85 at the moment, felt like I had to leave a review for other readers to an accurate expectation of the novel. **SPOILERS BE WARNED** The intial world background in the first 20 chapters is rather good, however there are quite a few inconsistencies that come about later on. One example of this is the specific money the exclusively use in other continents. This however, doesn't really explain what they DO use instead of this 'mage currency', or in general the setting of which normal people live. The MC later also says he can just imagine the currency into reality and yet he continues to look for his opponents money after defeating them. Another problem is how fast paced and overpowered the MC got got, sort of destroying story development as theres just not enough time to get to know the other characters well enough. Another issue is the most blatant is the characters dialogue, grammer and in general the writing. The potential of this novel is great however the bland dialogue and bland personality of side characters such as the MCs apprentices is just horrible. Just a few chapters in we got to know there specialities but that all the individuality they have. They continues to say things 'at the same time' in sync but the amount of times this has happened is just lazy writing at this point. In contrast the Mcs creations happen to be more interesting than any other character. The last issue I find is the pacing, currently the MC during chapter 85 is at the power level he should be at chapter 250, the immediate growth and powerhouse he becomes after entering the world is just offputting and feels more like a brief power short book than a actual novel. Overall the novel is subpar, it could go far however the issues involving the pacing, poor writing and lack of interesting individuals leads to a lesser than average read.

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