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EsliEsma
EsliEsmaLv144yr
2020-07-07 09:18

Hmm, the writing could be better and the characters lack in depth characterization. The pacing is fast, and the MC is rather evil. Ignoring my personal opinion on MC, my issue is the psychology state of the villain. Someone that broken would not be able to safely transition to another world and accept a new family, because they are incapable of trust. A more logical conclusion would have been killing his new family. My suggestion is ground your character more, this will make them more realistic and more terrifying.

Ring Of Chaos

jokere
4.3
256 Chs

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Seikatsu
SeikatsuLv5

He can't do that because he doesn't understand how to make a proper "evil" mc. This story has many contradictions and inconsistencies.

4yr
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jokere
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Hi everyone Welcome to my novel I am an Egyptian writer, and I am now writing my new novel in Arabic I am translating the chapters myself I want to tell you that the novel has 500 Arab chapters so far. But this is the first time it's translated into English. I hope you like the story, and I hope my translation won't stop you from enjoying it. I appreciate your support, and I hope to hear your thoughts and opinions all the time.

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TheNovelQueen
TheNovelQueenLv3

This is some dope ass story with a crazy maniac mc and the plot is crazy and unique form others.. You will love the story and its progress is way good than some top novels. Grammer may concern you sometimes, but for a reason it would not bother you much. The progress makes you addicted to this ****.. Not for kids who loves kind mc, hates killing, help everyone and sacrifice everytime and ****.. Give it a try and you wont regret this ****(warning not for weak hearts).

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DaoistpLHCRH
DaoistpLHCRHLv1

Damn it man. This novel is fucking addictive. I’m so much addicted to it, I can’t describe it. I always keep thinking what will happen next. I just love it. So thank you jokere for this fucking goddamned novel.

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Moh_Tad
Moh_TadLv4

I tell you this narration is different from what you are used to reading from various novels, it is of a different nature The hero of the story is distinguished, exciting events, summit in surprises, a strange but alien way of narration, it is distinguished by its nature I suggest you to follow this story or you will regret it too much I have read this novel up to Chapter 500 and I put it in the list of 3 best novels I've read in my life

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DarkMist
DarkMistLv13

Seriously I have been forced to write this review, even though I had only read 6 chapters... For what reason? It's simple, its a good story but the author simply could not fully describe his thoughts (for me) and inconsistent with the use of words/terms/phrases, like the description of his parents, of having cat ears and tail but in the "Status" what was written in the race is that they are human instead of hybrid (human+monster) and one more the author said that hybrid is a slave for both human and demons, so how could his father become the mayor of a village? If the author could just make a revision to the previously posted chapters before putting updates to solve the inconsistency of the story it would surely increase its quality and readability, and lessen my frustration 😆😅... I suggest that the author do some proofreading and editing before posting a chapter cause this is one of his common mistakes. 😁 So I'm gonna stop reading this story for now, and try again in the future, hope that by that time you made some revisions/amendments... 😄

4yr
Daoist689073
Daoist689073Lv3

Feels like its written by an angsty ****, and the writing quality leaves a lot to be desired, lots of spelling and format errors, desperately needs an editor

4yr
MrHit
MrHitLv2

Right so I'm redoing my review because the author couldn't take me disliking his work and deleted my review XD Anyways the novel is an average work with nothing special going for it. It's a typical novel with an added edginess to it. The author set up the story pretty well in the first chapter and I'm sure this is how a lot of people got hocked but after that its a slow ride down typical cliches I've seen many a time. If you want something to read quickly as junk food while you wait for other novel's to update this isn't half bad for the purpose.

4yr
1_lol
1_lolLv3

A legendary novel, the best of what I have read, I advise everyone to give it a chance because it will excel over all novels and I wish success to the writer and thank him for his efforts in translation and editing

4yr
DesolateRipper
DesolateRipperLv4

Very rough a lot of the problems can be easily solved though with a simple edit by someone even slightly proficient in english The main character is incredibly edgy but expresses it immaturerly and incredibly often, as if he has 8th Grade Syndrome. His trigger word is death if you say that, or it even flits across his unstable little mind be prepared for a full on ****storm. The largest flaws with the novel, in my opinion is the characters very exaggerated descriptions of himself and his the constant references to his past life, it doesn't really move on from that so your often pulled back to something that does not help build character depth

4yr
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