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Lord_EternityLv44yr
2021-04-08 06:43

Ok 60 chapters of this nearly killed half my braincells. Dont know why there are so high ratings for the story. The starting was so messed up and doesnot makes sense. If you get a letter written before suicide by your sister stating some men abused her, what will you do? Well mc doesnot tell the cops to immediately catch the culprits but calls the girl the letter was written for. Then whole long drama so that culprits can run away. FL stepbro murdered her mother(attempted) but she doesnot call the cops immediately after getting free. Mc is billionare CEO just for sake of being a CEO. He appearantly doesnot have any power or influence. Both protagonist don't actively do any actions to catch the culprits. The interactions sometimes are cringey af. Now if you ask me why I read this? Because somehow webnovel recommended me this WOW! And there were so many positive reviews so I thought its genuinely goood. Well maybe many people like it but maybe this is not my cup of tea.

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Shreya_Jagtap
Shreya_JagtapLv3

IKR too many grammatical mistakes and plot holes. It just didn't make sense. I wonder why there are so many positive reviews when I couldn't understand a thing

Simon_Lavenzer
Simon_LavenzerLv10

Thanks for the warning . I was almost caught by the hook in the Discription and the good detaled reviews..

theyoungestchild
theyoungestchildLv2

its a great story but : too much smut+too many grammatical mistakes=trash (sorry if its u r first novel) if u r gonna novel and aren't good with English get a friend to edit for u particularly someone who's good at english plus the way u wrote your in a dialogue kind of way (''for example: Mark: ..... Anna: ..... Mona: .....'') just killed the entire novel's vibe sorry if it's your first novel, I just don't like. So to all u fans of this novel u can comment and trash me all u want I'll accept with open arms😛

BrewingFantasies
BrewingFantasiesLv3

They're swapped reviews and fake stars, though I wonder why would one create such image if themselves when they've no intention of improving!?

Shreya_Jagtap:IKR too many grammatical mistakes and plot holes. It just didn't make sense. I wonder why there are so many positive reviews when I couldn't understand a thing
bellamie_ranes
bellamie_ranesLv1

I really cannot endure the grammar 💔💔💔💔💔💔💔💔💔💔💔 Just by saying that it has got poor grammar is overrating it😂.. .. on offense, by something must be done! I merely thought that is was gonna get better but the grammar ain't changing🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦 Perhaps you guys should try my novel: EVA IN HIGHSCHOOL I bet you'd all love it. .. _ it's my first 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺

Alexder_kool
Alexder_koolLv13

I agree with you, 🤭 I dropped it so long ago

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