Review Detail of RenuKakkar in BECOMING A PHOENIX (SYSTEM)

I have read 6 chapters. The story is developing well. Stability is good as already 17 chapters have been published. Character design is good. The characters, at the moment only 3 have been introduced. Pace is good. World background is the present time (before the Virus in Wuhan). Writing quality is good. I did notice a few grammatical mistakes, but these did not interfere with the reading of the story. There is an issue with tenses. Mistakes do happen and the writer may not be able to see them. I have started to run the draft through a grammar checker before posting it. The story seems to be a gaming story with all those figures appearing. It is different. All the best.