Review Detail of inhalingnovels in My Vampire System

the plot definitely has some potential however, the pacing is killing me and... the characters. what happened to the characters so far, I can't seem to feel like the characters are alive they lack personality another thing is it feels like the plot if forced there are too many coincidences for which some are explained but they still lack some sense for me also, what happened to Vorden's personality? did the author decided to turn down hid obsessiveness because of the reader's comments?