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PassengerGrim7
PassengerGrim7Lv4

Okay, this novel is good. Why is that? Warning: Tiny minora spoiler ahead. Read at your own risk. Let me clarify something first in today's novels regarding this genre. Whether they are Japanese, Chinese, or original ones, they have cliches. The repeating happenings that it has becomes predictable and boring. So boring that reading the synopsis or the first chapter will make you lose interest. This one, this novel is a fresh addition because it has new gaming aspects told in a storytelling that will bait people to voluntarily go to the deepest layer of 'the abyss', LOL. Writing Quality: Storytelling factors such as the dialogue and information given in between isn't lacking or excessive. The cliffhanger is really good especially that first chapter. As per the basic requirement every author must learn, "show, not tell", the author has mastered it. It is at the level you would end up engrossed reading the story. The last thing is the fillers. Nope, there's almost no fillers or whatnot, atleast for me. Stability Of Updates: From what I observe, there's unstable updates for this one in the last couple months. But now author is uploading daily chapters. So do not worry fellow reapers. Wow, two chapters per day? With 1500-200 average words? You're a beast man. Story Development: Now, this is what I like about it. Only second to world background. Not too slow and not too fast. The pacing is excellent and far better than any novel out there that get power-ups to one punch any obstacle in the way. If there would be future face slapping events then it will be different. Overall, you wouldn't experience the ypical elements involving the gamers, people, the game master and monsters in the typical litrpg genre. Simpy because of the unique theme and setting where it all took places. Character Design: Fleshed out characters that certainly is an individual. Not some characters that simply follows the wil of their gods. Goals amd motivations, check. Personalities, flaws, addiction, and minor tidbits that makes them a person, check. The main characters arnt't some godly geniuses that knows everything one way or another and will implement everything. Tbh, I have so much to learn from the author, 😭✌ World Background: Now this is what I really liked about this one. The world building. Having some modern element helps the readers connect with the story. Especially the memes.😂 What really is the greatest thing I liked about it is the definition of the abyss, made possible dur to the death of DEATH Himself. What an irony. The embodiment of death dies? Nice. Anyways, I hope this small review will help new readers. Also, check my book, Magic In The Galactic Era.

Grimthorn
GrimthornLv5

So it’s that time again I have been force- ahem persuaded to once again drag myself out of my cave and review a story. I would like to say this is based on my opinion so take what I say with a grain of salt. Writing quality- for me five stars it’s clean I didn’t notice any errors that hampered my reading and no spelling mistakes were particularly noticed. Stability of updates- again five stars i would give it more if I could since this is the authors second novel which he is updating with his first. Story development- I gave this category four stars this is mostly due to lack of chapters since ideas differ vastly from execution though I will fully admit I like the presented idea of the novel and it’s current progression hence the four stars. Character design- for me it’s five stars I will say I’m not picky. I don’t even need a design for characters to work in my head, but I know some people are rather particular with getting an image so I encourage you to read it and see if it works for you or not. World building- for this I gave it four stars like story development there just isn’t enough for me to say it is amazing though it is brilliantly mysterious and so far consistent though this might change in the future though I hope it doesn’t. Now with Webnovels categories out of the way it’s time for my thoughts and opinions that didn’t seem to fit in any of them. First whilst I’ve said some very nice things about this novel there are some things that bugs me indefinitely that I can’t gloss over like some other choices. The major gripe I have and that’s the author tells a lot to the readers there is little to no inferring of character traits and characteristics of the cast since it’s told straight up with out any subtly. Which I found personally annoying especially when it’s repeated. Though it doesn’t detract from the story. I also so understand that it could just be a style choice and I’m just not clicking with it particularly. Another thing that is related to the a fore mentioned point is that we are told about character moments and that could be fun and show off the characters of Leo and Morganna especially they get shoved to the side with a couple lines of exposition whilst I suspect that this is due to the author wanting a certain pacing of the novel it still feels like a waste of potential of exploring the characters. Right onto something else that I have a slight distaste for character bipolar disorder whilst a lot of the characters are great they are fun to read about as they explore the new world. There is one character that I don’t sit well with and that’s the main character Leo himself aside from the authors Infamous brand of naming (curse you Cruz) the thing i am against is how he shifts seemingly out of nowhere at first he’s introduced as a self proclaimed bastard of a person he isn’t Voldemort evil but he happily sells away the souls of gamers for the chance of resurrection. The only problem I have with this is that he seems to care too much by the people that jump into his game. There isn’t an arc where he learns the benefits of being nice to people he just seems to suddenly care about the players which In my eyes doesn’t fit his established character of being unscrupulous to achieve his dream. I don’t know maybe it’s just me. In conclusion it’s a very fresh story exploring something mystical with a very fun cast of characters. It’s something I would recommend if you enjoy a more mysterious style with a system that is different to the usual whilst I am at odds with something’s in this novel it doesn’t detract from an entertaining read plus my name makes a cameo so there’s that. Now hopefully the author will remove the gun from my head. Pretty please.

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