Review Detail of killjoy103 in E.S. System: Return to the Enchanted Planet

A scientific explanation of mana. Something I have never seen before. That is why I am doing a review. The story is of a group of teenagers (mage) who came back to explore the earth after something called mana apocalypse. Writing Quality: I think the author has put a lot of time behind it. there is a nice flow of the plot. the info had hidden quite perfectly in the story. It's like any other but reading it feel different from other writing. Stability of updates: it's 1/day. too quick to say anything about it. hope the author will keep up. Till now the chapters are >2000 words. Story development: It is six chapters long. too soon? no. The authors have shown me so many emotions(fear, anger, resentment, loneliness, pain. and it is just 6 chapters long), so much back story without even written about it, what can I say this is awesome. This is one of the best parts of the story. Character Development: Let's not talk about mc. Let's not spoil it, but one chapter appeared in chapter 1 and died by 5. author concluded about him by 6 with just 4 appearances. yet I can't help but feel sorry for him. This is awesome. Though till now it feels mc driven plot. I hope the more important characters will be there as the story develops. World Background: there are two worlds, earth and will. hope we will know more about them soon enough. my words: it started for a contest. I hope the author doesn't give up after the contest is over. the good point is if it wins it will be contracted so no chance of stopping then. Please author send me moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.