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2020-07-21 23:26

This has huge potential and the story is really good. The way the novel is written feels like it was done by a professional author. Kudos to the author for this. The only downside for ME here is when changing the point of view. I feel like you can improve on that part such as how he reacts/feels when that happened instead of copying what was already written? This is just my opinion though.

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Chainslock
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I’ll try my best and proofread those parts. Thank you very much!

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Chainslock
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What I like most about writing ANDROMEDA is that . . . I was able to create people whom I think are closer to me than I’ve ever been closer to (real) people—you construct their thoughts, emotions, characteristics, and appearance as their basic foundation. You put the characters into trouble and think how they handle it with their different attitudes and perspectives. This is what I liked best—because my main characters composed of people like an archeologist, a doctor, a researcher, a biologist and a former sergeant-in-arms. I liked how they have their individuality. I outlined ANDROMEDA a month ago when I watched about Lovecraft in Ted Ed’s educational videos in their writer’s workshop, regarding how to harness the “fear of the unknown.” I think it’s thrilling how characters first will know little just like the readers, and as the story goes, and when the truth is revealed, both the readers and the characters would have the complete grasp of whatever it is that’s occurring. It’s like being with someone, and you watch them grow. And you grow along with them. I’m writing ANDROMEDA to explore a new world—to venture to the “unknown” fearlessly. What I aim to happen is to have the characters be closer to the readers—seize their hand and watch them grow. Create a new world being linked to ours. Create that connection. I welcome you to ANDROMEDA; and I hope, my dear reader, we will be with you til the end of the “unknown.” Until we know fully the truth — or is it the truth we are seeking? Find out more on ANDROMEDA.

mrmrcia
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I've never seen several concepts integrated so perfectly in one story. I'm not into archaeology, but this made me look up some details. It marvelled me how meticulous the preparations of archaeologists during their excavation seasons! No wonder Ephraim wanted to go to Cairo. Also, I'm a nerdy of astronomy, primarily on cosmology. This novel just keeps on dishing out facts like a freakin' black hole with its hawkings radiation. That Arthurian legend is probably a disguised theory, one that I've definitely read but can't remember somehow. You included extensive facts and surprisingly, they are not out of place. They were purposefully placed, which aided in the learning of the readers. We're discovering things along with Ephraim. Lucian better look at that x-coordinate. My favourite character here is definitely Samuel. Others might favour Bertholdt for his casual maturity, Esmeralda for her cuteness and intellect, Hiroaki cause he's a badass, or Ephraim for his reasonableness. However, Samuel is being true to himself, being merely a kid in the midst of accomplished adults. I don't mind his sharp, unreasonable tongue, since, maybe, it's his defence mechanism. He chose to be there for his sister and that's commendable! Some of us will definitely relate to having Joanna as a parent, and you conveyed her adamant refusal to what Ephraim really wanted for himself. It's painful reading this; it is so relatable! The characters are well established, making the readers feel like we know them personally. They are very distinguishable in every passage! I utterly love your story! Please be my Ephraim and teach me! I will be supporting! Best wishes to you, author! Sorry for the lengthy review!

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