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Shining
ShiningLv44yr
2020-04-27 23:25

First of all I commend your writing skill, your Grammer was exceptionally good and story was build in a great way. I loved reading this one. I'm looking forward for more chapters. Keep writing and thanks for working hard :)

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Thank you so much!

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PoeticPenguin
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(Spoiler of another book included) There’s a play called Our Town that exemplifies some of the aspects of Death in this story. The Dead in Our Town is quite lifeless and does not have any clear goal or aim. They are just... existing. Newcomers of the Dead attempt to go back and relive their lives, but end up coming back due to how fast life is. A newly dead girl says that no one appreciates the world for its beauty. Furthermore, the Dead says the living live in a cloud of ignorance and it seems like they’re shut up in little boxes. However, I reckon that the Dead is just as ignorant as the living. After all, if the living are shut up in little boxes, then the Dead are shut up in coffins. Though the Dead can see the living’s ignorance, they cannot see their own. I think this book will go into how the Dead is ignorant in different ways. Some cannot let go of the past, some cannot let go of death, and maybe some later cannot let go of either. This is a fresh new concept especially to Webnovel as it concerns life and death, but more-so the life during death. Though the author makes tiny mistakes from time to time (that are easily fixable), I believe she is a great writer who is able to use the MC’s perspective to truly shape the whole book while making it aesthetically pleasing to read. It’s a diamond in the rough right now, but I’m sure it will only shine brighter later. I do think she needs to add some info here and there to explain certain concepts to the readers, but otherwise the book is on a good track. If you ever want a truly amazing book to read, check out Jenji’s works. They are of the most top quality here in Webnovel in my opinion. Anyways, I expect much from this book even though we’re only 2 chapters in and good luck author!! ☺️

Jenjibread
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What is there after this life? I've pondered that question for many sleepless nights. As a bioengineering major, this question seems obvious. After the last action potential fires, we're pretty much done for. But for the writer in me, that answer isn't enough. So, this tale is an exploration of the Underworld and all the lost hopes that couldn't be achieved in one lifetime. I rated this pretty shamelessly because this is a story that has been on my mind for a long time, but if you are deciding between reading this story or not, an actual in-depth review is as follows. Writing Quality: I experiment with some dark humor elements and symbolism, and I do strive for near-perfect grammar. Obviously, there will still be imperfection, however. Stability of Updates: This will be a relatively short story, and I'll update near-daily until it is completed. Story Development: It is a collection of different scenarios as seen through this Underworld virtual reality system, and every few chapters will present a new character's story. They will be about the "what ifs" in life and what could have happened (for examples of the type please refer to the synopsis) and will all be linked together by the overarching protagonist and her adventures. Character Design: Dabria seems pretty blunt at first, but she's really just an introverted hardware designer at heart. She's scared of leaving the world having done nothing with her life, and even more, she wants to leave a mark and be remembered because she fears for the nothingness after life. World Background: The Underworld has WiFi and facial recognition. Enough said.

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