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Kiiara
KiiaraLv124yr
2020-05-20 13:05

Never play baseball before, but this is a great story for you who does love this sport. The author knew their stuff and chose the correct diction to describe the process of the baseball game. I love how the author wrote the process of the characters training instead of suddenly going genius over it out of nowhere. Although yes, the character is granted some cheat by having these amazing inborn skills, but the author still makes him lack of basic foundation in baseball since he never plays before. So, this is a very logical plot which I’m fond of. For writing wise, I do think there’s some room for improvement but overall it’s adequate. It just needs some little editing. I do recommend breaking down your paragraph to make it easier on the eyes, because some parts, it does seem long. Good luck and keep writing author! 🙏🏻

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is it like the hitting zone??

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