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2021-10-02 12:10

hi author I'm new here hehe. so, as I was reading your story I seem to encounter a lot of redundant words in a single paragraph like 'because'. it's ruining the flow of words, can you kindly avoid doing that in the future? thanks in advance. anyway, I'm still below chapter 50. good day.

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