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RaSi
RaSiLv24yr
2020-06-24 14:46

First of all, the cover is awesome. For the story it's equally great. I hope for Allaine to rise soon and support others like him. Maybe a gang would be fine also. An interesting story.

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Azzack
AzzackLv5

My honest review of the story so far. (Chapter 39) Writing Quality: Below average It started off pretty amazing. I have to say the introduction was fantastically written. The writer must have worked really hard and gotten many references for its superb introduction. However, due to the beginning being so good, as you read past that, the terrible grammar that comes afterward becomes incredibly glaring. hopefully, the good introduction helps keep the readers from turning away. Personally, it's very difficult for me to read a story when I can't help noticing the mistakes. The main thing to work on is probably the usage of present and past tense. Grammar mistakes are abundant of course. Also, for some reason, the writer always write the 'i' for 'its(it's)' in capital letters. It bothers me. Stability of Updates: Five stars all around! It could be fast or slow, I'll give full marks. Personally, I am a quality over quantity type of person. So if posting fast updates compromises your quality, i think it's better to go at your own pace so that you're actually satisfied with what you write. :) Story Development: Great The story's pacing is actually quite good. they give you time to understand the characters properly before jumpstarting all the action. Thus we as readers are able to emphasize with their hardships more. Character Design: Excellent I surprisingly like how the author wrote the story on the main lead. He feels like he has a lot of depth. There are many layers to his character, reasons for his aspirations, and believable obstacles to achieving them. I love a story of characters straying from the main path so it's a big plus as well. World Background: Good While it's not fantasy or cultivation, it's a realistic world that is closer to home. set in the poor area of the Philippines, it gives us readers an eye-opening view of how the poor area of said country actually works and how the people their are struggling. Conclusion: I think this is a really well thought out novel from a down to earth writer. While it may be difficult for non-philippine readers to understand some of the nuances (me included), it has a lot of depth and heart. Although I do hope that my dear writer really works on his/her grammar. I have to say I'm really proud of my fellow South East Asian writers :D Although I'm not Filipino, I'm a Malaysian and love my neighbors <3 I hope we all succeed! :)

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