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LyingCrowPromises
LyingCrowPromisesLv104yr
2020-09-13 14:22

A perfect five. This story has a solid plot, the writing style flows better than a river, and the characters are so clearly distinguished even if there are just 7 chapters to this master piece. One sacrificed himself for the others, and just one felt it could happen. He was the one who cared the most in the group, and that also shows something. His friend that foresaw his death was probably the one who understood him the best. I almost cried because I could understand the sentence: Because you care the most. It's such a heavy thing to carry. Thank you author, write things like these more.

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LinYang
LinYangAuthor

Thank you for your review- it means a lot to me. I'm glad that you read so much into it. There's so much that can't be expressed with words, but I'm glad you saw it. I hope that I can write other things like this, but at the same time, I feel like this might be the only thing that I will ever write that will be this way. But I will try, because there is no point in not trying.

LyingCrowPromises
LyingCrowPromisesLv10

I'm used to analysing, and overdoing it, but I'm glad that my observation made you happy.

LinYang:Thank you for your review- it means a lot to me. I'm glad that you read so much into it. There's so much that can't be expressed with words, but I'm glad you saw it. I hope that I can write other things like this, but at the same time, I feel like this might be the only thing that I will ever write that will be this way. But I will try, because there is no point in not trying.
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Hua_Li_An
Hua_Li_AnLv3

This was a really, really great story. Well, it's not perfect, but it does take you in in a tide of emotions. I loved the colorful way the author wrote it. I could easily imagine the scenarios and if this was an anime, I would imagine just how the scenes would transition out. In fact, I think this can be a really great script for an animated short. I'd help out the author in making one if I knew the people who could help out, but sadly, I don't have the connections. On another note, the pacing was absolutely wonderful, and frankly, it's one of the best I've read in this platform. It's not so often people can read anything as filled with humanity and intrigue as this piece. Go on and read it, and find out why I like it so much. (Note to author: Listed below are a few things you can do to improve the piece: -General grammar: usage of commas, cutting down long sentences, using the right punctuations -Chinese Names Issues: Not all your readers know if a Chinese name is meant for a girl or a boy (and your names were a bit neutral too). I didn't realize which characters were male and female until the later chapters. Also, it's kinda weird how they call each other with their full names. I would think some of them might have nicknames. In fact, adding nicknames might make the story even more believable. (Xiao Huai~ Chang'er~, stuff like that LOL I suck at Chinese). -Time, oh, time: You forget to describe the time aspects more concretely. I was frankly a bit confused about when the explosion would occur. And little things, too, like how they suddenly just jumped from the Hua Residence to the library. Fix it up a bit more for coherence. And... that's about it? Improve it more and it can be a masterpiece. Super great job!)

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