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Malignant
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2020-04-05 07:57

Cheer up buddy, you're book is good. Just need more exposure and feature. Don't mind the rankings so much. History is a hard genre to write, but for you to write it like how you do is already good enough. -condiments

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yaoyueyi
yaoyueyiLv5

Sir Slothy, pin this review prithee! ༼ つ ◕o◕ ༽つ Entire review below wast thrown in (a very inaccurate) Shakespearean converter to add some spice to it. (it seemeth appropriate considering the background of this story.) Below, one may findeth an honest review, as sugar coating is not mine own style. [Writing Quality : 3/5 stars) One may forsooth understandeth the language of Sir Sloth rather well. However, it shalt beest did note yond one may findeth occasional typos, spelling mistakes, and a few other issues, which cometh together to detract 2 stars. I rate things with 3 being average though, so I would sayeth yond the quality is just in the middle. The novel forsooth pondered valorous f'r wn standards. I would suggest haply writing on Google Docs if 't be true not already. Docs tenders a grammar checker which doest help catch some of the basic errors (and spell check too). I find myself as just a grammar nazi, but I personally bethink yond most people shall readeth it without any issues. I would like to note yond sloth writes in a very styliz'd manner. Especially with this novel in first person, thee heareth the voice of the protagonist, Mike of Tarnow, from the house of Terrna of the starry moon crest, landed of the city of Tarnow, lord of the province and the surrounding villages, very clearly, which is wonderful because it adds to his character! [Stability of Updates : 5/5 stars] At which hour the Sloth is did motivate, none may standeth in his way of updates. Thither hast nev'r been an auth'r with more stable updates than the renown'd Sloth who hast grac'd the ordinary with his stability. [Story Development: 3/5 stars] The story follows the perspective of Mike of Tarnow, who is't transmigrates into the gentle's corse after tripping in his past life. He decides to useth his modern knowledge and arts to improve his current situation. The beginning may cometh off to others as a dram dry, but t's quite informative. People who is't art interest'd in history and culture shall findeth it very engaging, and it is clear yond the auth'r is well-knowledg'd and didst plenty of research ov'r the background. Story picks up 'round chapter four, but the information did provide ere is important too. I bethink yond I tooketh off both stars because of the info-dump-esque style at the beginning, which isn't very much a valorous idea. (the first chapter wast intriguing, and then the following two chapters wast very information-packed). The pacing, in mine own opinion, couldst've been better flow'd. Once the information deliver'd is ov'r, though, the pacing doest becometh rather interesting. The story hast a clear direction and plot which is most wondrous. [Character Design: 3/5 stars] To beest honest, i feeleth like Mike of Tarnow's character adapt'd too apace to the situation of transmigration. He may beest well-educat'd in the topics of history and the events yond hath happened, and yond he considers everything a game, but the fact yond he adapt'd in a matter of seconds doest want a did bite of believability. F'r example (spoiler hither), at which hour killing a sir, he doesn't showeth much of a reaction after doing so. This is account'd to the fact yond he treats this like a game, but considering how realistic everything cometh across, i feeleth like how he reacts is a did bite unrealistic. I eke wouldn't believeth yond an individual knoweth yond much history if 't be true i hadst not known the kind of person yond the author, Sir Sloth, is. Argal, the knowledge aspect of Mike of Tarnow's character doest maketh logical sense I indeed like the character Elia, who is't seemeth to beest the romantic interest. The lady seemeth interesting and the lady appears quite early on as well. I am excit'd to see and receiveth to knoweth that lady character a did bite moo. [World Background: 5/5 stars] As mention'd ere, Sir Sloth hast extensive knowledge ov'r history and culture (after all, this is bas'd off of the state he knoweth most wondrous). A clear demonstration of this knowledge is did include in the story, and thus, the background may seemeth very vivid. The useth of authentic cultural conversions and terms eke adds to the realistic depth of the world. Certes, this deserves a full five stars. Overall, the total rating is [3. 8 out of 5 stars]. In other words, above average. 'Twill beest an enjoyable readeth f'r those who is't art interest'd in the history genre, and those who is't enjoy transmigration 'r modern protagonist mindset characters. Sticking through the beginning shall forsooth beest worth t. Sir Sloth hast once again deliver'd a magnificent story. However, i has't mine own doubts if 't be true this novel is truly worthy enow to compete with the glory yond "While Others Cultivate, I Use My Unique RPG Leveling System to Cultivate Smut Romance With Their Girlfriends!", another worketh of Sir Sloth, holds. Yond novel is a true worketh of art, while the true value of this worketh is not quite yet certain, as not enow chapters has't been putteth out to generate a complete review. Regardless, these art mine own first impressions, which shall hopefully beest able to guide others if 't be true they can make shift to readeth through this detail'd (and very inaccurate) language! 'Twill not beest a loss f'r thee to readeth through this novel if 't be true thou art intrigu'd.

PommyJosh
PommyJoshLv11

A really good original novel that you won’t regret giving a read. Writing Quality - Not much to say about this because there are rarely any obvious mistakes I can pickup on. Stability of Updates - There are regular updates (Though, there are never enough chapters when you really enjoy a story). Story Development - I like the current development of the story and you can tell the author is either well read or has done some research into the current specifics of the story. I would like to have a closer look at the actual system and the main uses of it for the MC, because at the moment the most important aspects I can think of are the map and crafting. It feels like he has been neglecting his responsibilities as a Lord in his own territories and I would like to see his making better use and giving a better look into the running of his current lands. With all the statistics available from the system I would think that he could create some medium long and easy to understand plans? Character Design - The character designs for the people that matter are well thought out. Even some side characters and the general attitudes of the nobles proves enlightening. The only thing that irritates me at times is the Main Character and his many tangents. Though, I suspect that is a design of the author on purpose. It just seems like the MC likes to jump from one thing to the next like an excited child and not being able to wait to show his efforts to all the people (Yet having nothing physical to show for that idea yet) World Background - The general lay of the world is proving to be well written. I’m not particularly well informed on polish geography and what has been established is well done, It would prove useful for the author to at some point once the MC has a stable land ownership to creat a map with the different colour coding to show who owns what (I find it helps with visualisation). Overal, a fantastic piece of work.

PhilVictorovich
PhilVictorovichLv4

The story is set in Poland during medieval times, with the MC reborn from a modern gamer playing the game, to a novel coming from an illustrious background. He's respected but he's middle-lower echelon in terms of nobility. He knows a bit about this part of history, yet what truly gives him the foundation to stand out and develop is that he knows one simple fact about their current king, which is that he will abandon his kingdom and flee in 4-5 months time. This isn't something that by itself will make him rich and powerful, but it gives him the opportunity to take advantage of that fact. The way he's growing his influence, wealth and power is by making innovations and improvements to already existing things. For example, his beer business is doing really well, and he has expanded to 3 territories 112 chapters into the story, (all 3 of which are his, haha). His beer is considered to be on a different level, and knowing this he made it famous by using a couple of opportunities to make governors and nobles try it during noble social events in order to spread it. There's no ridiculous cheats, he doesn't get thousands of gold of income after a couple of chapters, hell even after 112 chapters that's still not the case. While from what I've said so far you might think that the MC's just good for making money, that's not the case. Funding an army is not so easily done, especially when your territory doesn't make enough money a month to open up a solid business. There are also the issues of manpower, which can't be solved in a short period of time by regular means, which means he needs territory if he wants more population fast. I can go on and on, but basically, him focusing on economic development so far is mostly because he needs it as a foundation to grow further. The main point that has attracted me to this story, is that the MC isn't a knight in shining armor that will risk his life for nothing. He's neutral, which i can deal with. The main issue I have with it however, is that while he kills most of his enemies, I don't find him ruthless enough. *Spoiler below this* Most recently, he defeated the man that wanted to take his wife as his own in a war in which he killed almost all of the enemies soldiers, and after the man stands on trial and is exiled, he doesn't off him after he's exiled. Yes he's already gotten all of his territory and money, but offing him is no problem and I don't see a good reason for him not to do it. Some smart nobles would know it was him that made his enemy mysteriously disappear, but so what? It's not uncommon and there won't be proof. So far the author has shown that he doesn't use tropes, but if the exiled guy with nothing to his name makes problems for the MC in the future, that's grounds for dropping the book. Overall it's a great novel, among the best of its rare kind. Novels similar to this are Black Iron's Glory, The World Online, etc.

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