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VoidHighLord
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2020-04-21 08:39

Just seeing that there will be no f4cking "Harem" that destroys many good Fanfics, I will already classify with 5 stars. πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄ βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺ⚫⚫⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺ βšͺ⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫⚫⚫βšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺ ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫ βšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺ⚫⚫⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫βšͺ βšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫⚫⚫βšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺ βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫⚫⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺ⚫βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄βšͺβšͺβšͺπŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄πŸ”΄ / οΎŒοΎŒβ €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €γƒ /// / )\β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €β €Y (β €β €| ( Ν‘Β° ΝœΚ– Ν‘Β°οΌ‰β €β €β € βŒ’(β € γƒŽ (β € οΎ‰βŒ’ Y βŒ’γƒ½-く ____/ | _β €ο½‘γƒŽ| γƒŽο½‘ |/ (β €γƒΌ '_δΊΊ`γƒΌ οΎ‰ β €|\ οΏ£ _δΊΊ'彑ノ β € )\β €β € q⠀⠀ / β €β €(\β € #β € / β €/β €β €β €/α½£========D- /β €β €β €/β € \ \β €β €\ ( (β €)β €β €β €β € ) ).β €) (β €β €)β €β €β €β €β €( | / |β € /β €β €β €β €β €β € | / [___] β €β €β €β €β €[___]

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Dragonic_Dao
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Damn, well thanks man.

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AsuraMonarch
AsuraMonarchLv6

My own personal opinion proceed with caution and an open mind. (FUCK I LOST A REALLY DETAILED REVIEW SINCE I ACCIDENTALLY CLICKED OFF.) This is the TL;DR - Good writing it is readable unlike some of the stories in the fanfiction section. It has quite the fast update rate with a decent word count for each chapter. Story development is interesting and fresh, it breaks free from unnecessary cruel characters./ indifferent cruel guys that only want girls and their bodies. or drama and angst. I'm not saying it is the best plot but it is certainly interesting. Character Design is kinda meh, it is ok but it could be better, not to mention some characters feel OOC (Out of Character) World Background A weakness in all fics and yeah since this is Multiversal it may need to invest in this for each different world, it doesn't need to be a big info dump but bits and pieces for when we need it would be nice. After all maybe Jin will go to a world where some readers aren't familiar with. These are more wordy reviews if you want to read them so go ahead if you want. Writing Quality - Good writing, you won't get headaches with this unlike other fics where it is like MTL. Format is also good and not obnoxious to read. Stability of updates - a relatively new fic with 24 chapters with decent word counts, you guess. Story Development - Interesting story, has some points where you may be a little confused over the plot or decisions but in the end it is an interesting read. And as you might see in the comment section I voice some of my thoughts. But over all a good story, technically at this point it is just about to kick into gear since BNHA is like the starter world. Character Design - Lacking in this area, yeah BNHA was supposed to be a starter world, let me list what I know about Jin and his companions (so far) Jin - a supposedly normal Otaku with somehow god-level acting or All Might is just super gullible. Is laid back and somewhat carefree but does deeply care for those he considers loved ones. Imagine Killua but not as cunning or smart. Izuku - Basically what I know via Canon. Really good friends with Jin, because of the USJ attack Jin basically killed off the League of Villains. Kai Chisaki 'Overhaul' - Asshole of a guy, think typical rival-friend, Gokudera before Tsuna saved him just not as aggressive. Criminal and ruthless killer that allowed and encourage for the torture of a child to abuse her quirk. Somehow gave up his dream to follow Jin, doesn't show why and instead acts like kind of a tsundere. Their first meeting left me scratching. Over all think of Kai as an OOC. Eri - Somehow despite still regularly seeing Kai has somehow gotten over her past and seeing him doesn't trigger panic attacks, opened up really quickly for no reason and is now a cute high and mighty princess against Jin. Yes children especially should have never have opened up or gotten rid of their trauma to what happened to them so quickly, while I don't expect PTSD attacks the change is way too quick to be natural. While I let this past before I am voicing my opinion now. So yeah, needs some more developing. World Background - the weakness numero uno of fics. Yes you made a fanfic of a world, you will think the reader has at least some basic knowledge so you don't think it is needed. But tell me straight up do you know the entire plot of a franchise by heart? and all the details accurately? Even stuff I've re-read a dozen times and I still can't confidently say yes. So while it doesn't need to be a whole lot occasional world building needs to be made. Think if I made a GoW or Worm fic, author has expressed their confusion over the franchise for GoW and doesn't seem to know of Worm. So why am I bringing this up? It is the context of the story. Multiversal Travel, I'll admit I sometimes read crossovers or multiverse stories of worlds that don't involve worlds I am familiar with, while some don't care about world building I do enjoy it when the Author does some to let me understand the world better. This also applies to Character Development, because if I don't know the personality of characters they feel one dimensional.

Dragonic_Dao
Dragonic_DaoAuthor

Yo author here. I clearly am doing this review a little late (I completely forgot about it) and am obviously giving myself a 5 star review as I have to be shameless for my own book. Besides that though, if you like a decently intelligent Mc, who goes to various fictional worlds, then give it a try. If you want a lone wolf then this isn't for you but if you want try it anyway and you might enjoy it. If you want op mc, I'd say give it a try in some parts he's definitely op, other parts I am not so sure but he'll probably remain quite op as he plays it safe. If you want a harem, then this is not for you, if you can look past that though, give it a try. Apart from that here is my actual review of my own book(to be fair I am probably biased): In all honesty though, I think my stability of Updates haven't been the best. This can be considered good or bad as they haven't been "stable" but I have released quite a lot more than I planned anyway, so although they may not be "stable" I think you readers prefer it. So I'd say 4ish stars for that (maybe 3 maybe 5) Apart from that Writing Quality, I don't know? Are we talking about grammar and spelling? If so I say I top most not all, but most authors on webnovel so I think that is actually a solid 4-5 star there. Story Development, I think for once my pacing was decent, I think at some parts I went at a good pace and I'd say for webnovel about a 4. Although some parts could have used more detail and some parts less I think that overall I did well as its a bit hard to manoeuvre in MHA's plot especially in the beginning. Character design is a 2.5 for sure. I only really have 1 OC, so more than that would be blasphemy on my part, but I think less than that would also be a bit harsh to me. World Background I'd say is a 3.5 as I do have my own world background apart from that ones set in the pre existing worlds, whether its good or not is up to you guys to decide. So I think overall objectively speaking for webnovel standard my novel is a solid 3-4 stars. Then again you can debate me on that.

Overwrit
OverwritLv3

This is my opinion, and as my opinion I do not recommend reading it. The author presents us a MC who at the beginning is super excited about everything, which is good, understandable to a certain extent, and you can see that you can calm down how to think things through in a short time, which shows that he is smart and cunning, also a good actor to fool All Might and keep his composure. Then he begins to decline because he relates too much to Izuku without reason, even he doesn't think about it himself, he treats him like a brother after knowing him for a few weeks and wants to help him improve (The author makes an obviously forced move to give him a lot of strength and in much less time than the original), we are never told why, he just does it. Let's go now to when they do the Kosei tests, the author makes again his forced movement to make Aizawa very dumb and leave the MC as if he was super good and all that shit, which is already a little bit meaningless and unnecessary, but he does it, creating a lot of very clichΓ© scenes that have no sense for the story, but it's only to make the MC look as if he was so smart and super good at choosing words. Then we have the thing of the attack to UA by Shigaraki, all that feels very forced in general in those parts, but I don't have much to comment about that because it's not relevant and I don't dislike it so much, except the part where the previous owners of the OFA know everything about the MC, that was really shitty. We have the part where he regrets everything about the fucking nothing literally, he tries to return the OFA to Izuku and does so much shit for it for no reason too, it's all so fucking forced and stupid that slowly the image of the smart, crafty MC, etc, will be forgotten, but he recovers a little bit by having that idea of rewinding his coals and having 2 OFA, still he falls back because out of nowhere he has to take care of a girl for no reason, probably because the author is one of those who likes Eri or feels sad for her. I think it would have been much better to have inherited the OFA from Izuku, then take it back, and make those Izuku embers become the OFA, that way they both have it but the MC has an even more powerful version, now Izuku has the more powerful version. Anyway, then the story starts to get filled with unnecessary fillers, and the reading became not only irritating, but boring, especially with the shit that everything changed in the tournament and now it will have to have a lot of allies. And to finish, I don't recommend reading it personally, although I quite like the way the author writes, but only that, as he does the story is of my total displeasure.

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