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2020-04-26 14:36

Wow. Congrats on 2000 power stone. One of the best stories. Really good chapter. And really good story so far. The main character is good and awesome. The world building is great. And the updates are consistent. Please update more.

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Hey, everyone. It's the author. I wanted to thank everyone who posted a review. They are really encouraging even the ones with the bad ratings. 😁 Anyway, I wanted to use this review to talk about what made me start writing this. First of all, I love the world of Harry Potter. I think we all shame that. But, there are certain things in it that really make me raise my eyebrows. I was watching the Deathly Hallows part 1 for the first time in maybe 6 years, and I saw one of the early scenes in it. In the scene, Voldemort was levitating Charity Burbage above a table with the inner circle of Death Eaters around it. Then Voldemort killed her because she had suggested that it was okay to associate or mate with muggles/muggleborns. And I was, like, did I really watch this when I was younger? They killed her like a pest and fed her to Nagini. Before dying, she pleaded with Snape, "Severus, please... we're friends." But he only looked at her silently. What if they were really friends? Its not impossible, they were colleagues for many years and she used his first name. But, Snape had made the sacrifice for the Greater Good. It was messed up. So, I started tningking how could an outsider change the HP world for the better. In truth, it was kinda simple. With power, influence, wealth anyone could do it. You don't need the Elder Wand or the Room of Requirement. But why did Dumbledore not do it? Even though he had all the tools. It was because he was too passive. He had too much faith in the good of people. So, I needed an MC that had seen the degraded side of society. Any muggleborn could probably be that person, but no one had any real chance to do it. So, I sent Alex back in time for his chance. And there we have it.

amaturewriter
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This is epic but kinda seems pointless and stupid....here me out.... the MC dosnt know anything important....he dosnt have any knowledge about the OOTP [it hasnt been shown...I mean dude didnt even know bills wife]....he dosnt have any knowledge regarding the prophesy/ horcruxes/ etx....so him going back in time seems pointless, he is just a side character .....but it is interesting.... if you get over the pointless MC...its cool cause here we have an MC whilst he dosnt have any knowledge he has other types of knowledge..cause he was a criminal.. suggestion: dont make MC a naive idiot that dives headfirst into confrontations, or tell others he is from the future...make him smart and cool not an idiot........make him OP...like beyond everyone...dude has over a decade of preparation time, and dont neuter him Add some romance and fluff...just build it. **; no bash but honestly hufflepuffs are useless....loyalty my ass....those cunts betrayed HP during second year...and the 4 th year......no benefit of the doubt was given to him despite him being their savior,,,,all of em thought he was the heir or was cheating..and too anyone that says that they helped harry during the war...well duh!...they were against a being that wanted them destroyed...many puffs werent purebloods.....point is, at the end of the day the puffs are worthless cunts that are basically useless, they were sheep that couldnt stand up for themselves.......[cedrick, didnt even help harry by giving him a clue about the dragon]......just my opinion

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