Review Detail of Zerofuggs in The Verlusian Conspiracy

Your grammar,(Tenses and punctuation in particular) takes me out of the unique story that you present, however this uniqueness stems mostly from the under-utilized military genre. Your characters although well defined, are cheapish and flat, sewing confusion into the plot as it is easy to confuse one, for another. The world, however is very unique. A great background for your story and honestly impressive.