Review Detail of iam_adh in The Verlusian Conspiracy

I enjoy this type of archetype, when war and stuff is involved. I'm intrigued with the story and I find myself wanting to know more about this world and where it will end up going. Now, the only problem I have is how the writing is. Of course everyone makes mistakes and there are typos, I'm not even focusing on that, but it's the pretense. I've noticed how the author phrases sentences in present form. For example- "The man walks to the door and opens it. Once he's inside he sees food and walk over to the food." If that's the author's way of writing and they're comfortable with it then I'm cool with that, but throw in some typos or misplacement of words and I start to get annoyed. Besides that, this story is great, keep it up!