Review Detail of Brian70707 in UpLeftDownRight Marvel

Dropped at chapter 5 for a few reasons. 1 author didn't edit it so that chapters 1 - 3 are actually chapters and not rants. 2 not clear so far on which marvel he is in there are alot of series of marvel 3 I dont like HAREM novels majority of authors are terrible at writing it 4 the steel staff which has 1 in 4 chance of destroying a limb if struck is to op for a weakassed mc 5 the karate thing, it be better if it was something like understanding of martial arts, it be collectively all his understanding and not a singular martial art. There are PLENTY OF BETTER martial arts in marvel than karate Suggestions to author 1 take an A4 sheet of paper draw line down middle and make a plot of what you want your story to have 2 change karate to martial artist 3 change steel staff description it's to op for a weak mc 4 READ OTHER MARVEL FANFICTION AUTHORS 5 know which marvel timeline you are going down and what you wish to change