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2021-01-03 20:17

Quite a nice writing style. While dialogue is more used than descriptions about surroundings, readers can make a decent image in their mind by just reading through the dialogue. Which is an art in and of itself. I do like the characterization of the characters without using much description, which is --again-- a very good thing. I've noticed slight mistakes/missing words like missing 'his', 'theirs' and a single occasion of a misused word, so quite well-written. But none of these "mistakes" take away from the reading experience. The characters are all beautifully portraited with enough drama between secondary characters to make them interesting as well! Very nice job! If I make one suggestion for the future: Try to use more descriptions of surroundings. Most people have enough with your language ad dialogue and/or can imagine the scene right in front of them. Others can't or would like to have some help from the writer, at least. Last but not least, please keep up the work! You are doing brilliantly!

Tempest & Temptation

NotBeatrix
4.7
48 Chs

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NotBeatrix
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Thank you for the detailed critique! I am more than appreciative for it. I definitely agree that these are all issues I struggle with, descriptions being the most difficult for me, but now with your detailed critique I will use your words to improve. Thank you again!

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Chaoscaller
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Excellent, I am glad I could help you! May I ask for your input on my story as well?

NotBeatrix:Thank you for the detailed critique! I am more than appreciative for it. I definitely agree that these are all issues I struggle with, descriptions being the most difficult for me, but now with your detailed critique I will use your words to improve. Thank you again!
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NotBeatrix
NotBeatrixAuthor

Of course! I will be sure to give you a detailed review as well!

Chaoscaller:Excellent, I am glad I could help you! May I ask for your input on my story as well?
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