those who want to read the novel I recommend it but don't expect a masterpiece the author is still in the early stages and puts too much weight on the comments. now this is my vote reading new chapters I hope to be able to change it. writing quality is good, stability is one chapter per day but chapters are a bit short. the story is developing too fast i understand mc started as a child and has a childhood span but does next to nothing but dry out his mother's breasts as he learns magic where he seems to learn it on his own because the mother doesn't has almost no interaction with his son when he uses magic or at least that's what you read, I don't start explaining the story well but being still at the beginning and having not caught on I can't give a precise vote so I will put it more positive too if for now the story is running too fast. the character is good and has potential being a reincarnate even if at the moment he behaves like a child and sometimes from moments of maturity and this is understood as later mc says he has to keep wearing his mask. the background of the world is not bad even if a little too simple but I hope there is more for now it is understood that there are 3 continents 1 populated only by humans, 1 by demons and the last continents there are human elves and monster / animal girls the human continent has a church so it is assumed that there are gods so maybe there are also other planes similar to yours or completely different with new races.
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That's true. I put a lot of weight on the comments. This novel is a lighthearted one where you can simply turn your brain off so I don't think small details are very important which is why I take real input from the comments. I don't think it's a bad thing(even if you don't imply it; this is for others reading this). I can't please everyone but the best I can do is make the story a little more enjoyable for those who took the time let me know their thoughts, right? I started this novel because I was in a bad state of mind. Writing this novel helps me and I want it to have the same effect on my readers. Sorry for the long rambling. You wrote something well thought-out so I wanted to reciprocate. I will take your comments about pacing to heart. I was planning to go on to the next volume after this but I've changed my mind :)
I think you should read the comments and help you in the story but you have to do more than your own head of course you must not overdo it by adding unnecessary and external things to the plot, I read that in the comments they complain about the arc of childhood and you have tried to speed up the story but I think it's going well so for now the novel is fine I don't say that the small details but to have a bit of logic, I hope you will give less weight you have comments and continue with the story even if they say it is slow I think it has a its rhythm, try not to wander too much into the chapters but focus more on the plot. sorry for the unclear answer but i'm going one way and i put down some ideas of mine in the comment i hope it can help you, i don't speak english so if there are mistakes sorry again
I'd have some novels for you to read to get an idea of what you could do and expand the story
the most important thing i forgot to tell you is that you have to stick to the title and description, try to give setbacks to the protagonist but don't make them exaggerated like destroying the kingdom, or even bother earl by the king etc .. .
the most important thing i forgot to tell you is that you have to stick to the title and description, try to give setbacks to the protagonist but don't make them exaggerated like destroying the kingdom, or even bother earl by the king etc .. .
I agree he is not really a degenarte lol he is just a good little kd
let's hope that when she later expands her harem with the school teachers, I imagine the scene where a teacher was in class with her mother and tries to take revenge on her son by giving him some problems until one day she calls him back to his office and mc if it comes out mum explained to me that when you are alone with a woman you have to try to behave lovingly and conquer the teacher lol (I wrote an idea). or the princess says my mom is so lonely it would be better if I helped her cheer up earl e mc cucuto il king🤣🤣🤣🤣 I hope that with time it becomes more degenerate or at least the degeneration must be compared to the stronger force the more perverted it is and loses moral ties
