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Evil_For_the_WIN
Evil_For_the_WINLv54yr
2020-06-07 16:40

This novel is original. You're warned. Don't be surprised by the Opening (in a novel. Yeah I know it's crazy) or the astronomical amount of A/N (polls, reports about polls or information that author wants to convey). Besides all this it's a good story, a great story even, a little fast-paced but it's good like that. I want two things for this novel: 1- More chapters (real chapters) 2- Delete the A/N when they are obsolete.

Machine God of the Multiverse

GrimHunterV
4.2
32 Chs

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Kenny1243
Kenny1243Lv15

Lol i thought i saw a the McDonald’s logo

4yr
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Injustice
InjusticeLv5

You did

Kenny1243:Lol i thought i saw a the McDonald’s logo
4yr
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ThanatosGreekGod
ThanatosGreekGodLv14

Kenny1243:Lol i thought i saw a the McDonald’s logo
3yr
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0Angel
0AngelLv2

Horrible writing / badly developed dio character / re-edited some chapters and developed more because in less than 10 chapters the jojo bow is finished / OP character too fast chapter 3, he is already a power monster and the OC character is too spoiled by useless times skip to finish the bow. Author, please redo your story to make it plausible.

4yr

Demiurge_Ohara
Demiurge_OharaLv12

Writing Quality- 2 stars Stability of updates- 3 stars Story Development- 2stars Character design - 2 World background- 2 The grammar is bad, spelling is so-so. Barely readable unless you double check. The author needs to practice about English vocabulary and download Grammarly to further improve your story. Stability of updates is so-so or wreck. Sometimes there's an update, sometimes not. Now for the story development. The Character improvements isn't even written and to much unnecessary information dump is being written. Wasting a lot of space and the time skip is just horrible as a lot of potential wasted and he didn't do anything productive besides relying on luck. At least he use common sense. All the characters from jojo and his minions are nerfed. Wisdom and Intellect wise. The interaction feels force coupled with horrendous grammar made my eyes itch. Character design. I don't wanna talk about it. It's no different from your mediocre Gamer fic coupled with Cliché ness and kinda naive. Then again. He doesn't have much problem. World background. He written... well... nothing. No political talking nor architecture and culture etc. Its basically nonexistent alonf with confusing tyime skip that has no excuses leave a lot of conundrum. There's more of it but im to lazy to write. Now. The Jojo world isn't powerful because of their Raw power. Rather its because of their Intellect that have such imagination along with their analytical mind made them them. The Mc isn't that smart nor wise on my opinion. Rather an arrogant man filled with arrogance because of his power. Forgetting the fact that several weaker stands can cause him trouble or kill him at all. He act high and mighty and all. Plot is nonexistent. Not different from the original. There are more I want to talk but my fingers are tired pleasuring my phone as it vibrate you see. Ps : If you found something wrong in my comment please do say something and please make it believable or something like that. I lost quite a lot of brain cells whenever I encounter blabbering fan boys. ( not this mind you. ) And i see potential yet the execution is just... horrendous. Also don't delete this otherwise how'd you improve?

4yr
TintedvCeo
TintedvCeoLv5

OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP,OP.And its so good good good good.More chaps.pls.THIS IS GREAT,keep going.!!!!

4yr
MutedSith
MutedSithLv3

The Fan-Fic had great world building and drive, but there wasn’t enough details to fill in most of the plot holes, the chapters weren’t long enough and the character development was terrible.

4yr
NotEyptiandio
NotEyptiandioLv5

Dio: ZA WARDO TOKI WA TOMARE!!!!!!! The World : MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA MUDA!!!!!!

4yr
Maurz
MaurzLv4

I don't think this guy understands what grammar is...................................................................................................

4yr
Queen_Karina
Queen_KarinaLv14

There is no romance. The author said the love intrest is megan fox but all that happens is the mc enslaves her. 📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉📉🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑🗑

3yr
Miguel_Rosalez
Miguel_RosalezLv12

I voted like 10 stones when are you going to make a new chapters.g gh uryryeyry re uytyr j.g return j.g f j.g f j.g f red f rdd hff ryuu iihf eye uht eu tree ryuu uytyr guy jug

3yr
Cerberusuper
CerberusuperLv14

Reveal spoiler

4yr
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