Review Detail of IamMountTai in (Un) Fortunately the Yandere is Not After Me

CRITICAL REVIEW Finished the novel. I'm glad I read it. The writing for the most part was good. There were a few mistakes here and there but really nothing bad. If there was an issue, it would be that some time it was hard to figure out who is saying what. Especially in the beginning or when new names pop up due to the abundance of characters. I can't keep track of who is who. Particularly as the writing keeps using He or she. The chunked paragraphs also made the flow of the story sometimes hard to understand who was talking. For the most part was realistic, was meaningful, and the adults in the story were used very well. Love the idea of the adults not telling the answers, but helping guide or give clues to the problems for the teenagers. One of the biggest issues I did find was not really cliches or tropes but rather the fact that the Author uses the whole having an unfortunate thing happen to force characters to confront. Particularly trapping characters. I enjoyed primarily the first half. The mid half felt messy with all these new characters come in. The laters (V8 V9) were better quality. The issue is ofc you learnt your lesson was the amount of harem candidates. 9 was really damn too much. It brought down the story quality down a lot. Minor Spoilers~~~~~ Rant The idea of having multiple heroine endings ended up being rather... wish-fulfillment fanservice. It was no different from Bokuben and Gotoubun no Hanayome attempt to make everyone happy. Qualtiy wise it was better than Gotoubun and about the same as Bokuben. I'm quite disappointed with them. Even tho I did enjoy a few of them. Without sufficient development, everything just feels forced and not to mention they were short. Moreover, it neglects so many other factors which contribute to the mc's decision. Having a forced event which favours x heroine is fine. But it can't neglect everything else. I don't buy any of the endings besides Erina which still felt inadequate. From the start when we jumped into the first route with best girl Misei, the flow was disrupted. And I hate that a lot. Because it just jumps randomly into it. At least I am glad you acknowledged Erina as the main girl. The reason you gave actually makes sense although inadequate to address other things: (paraphrased) "He had fallen for the girl since long ago, he held back because his heart truly wanted someone he believed he couldn't have." Although there was so much else to be explored. I tend to be quite harsh on main girl, and I'm glad that Erina didn't take the spotlight and the story had lots more attention to others. Man the story really feels like it has many things unresolved. Even tho the epilogue sums stuff up, but thats just 1 chapter. With all the drama in this story, you cant do it like that you know. You made the relationships as hella complicated and it kinda seemed like you were like. Fuck I can't do this anymore and just went with this. Poor, but I don't blame you. But having said that, all you needed to do was make it a complete 30+ chaps of Erina and everything else finishing up and tidying up. And it was perfect considering you had the whole her donating blood before the multiple ending nonsense. Perfect way for the MC to go musing about her. Despite all my complaints, this novel still deserves 5. The effort and everything else is really well-deserved. Thank you! Misei best girl! Erina Rank2! Everyone else, whatever!