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2020-01-24 07:57

Ill start off by saying that the story is great. I love the light comedy and the MC, the story itself hasn't revealed an obvious plot yet but what is there is well written, good job. The only thing I can think of for the writing itself is that you use some words and phrases repetitively. Its not so often that its bad but it is often enough that I feel like it would be better if you tried to substitute other words in. Besides that one thing I personally really liked the main character that was introduced at the beginning and I feel like what happened in chapters 3 and 4 could have been summed up more so as to get back to the original MC sense they didn't explain a whole lot and felt really like all they did was introduce some other characters.

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Thank you for the feedback, I will work on not using things repetitively :)

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